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Old 06-25-2003, 12:12 PM   #1 (permalink)
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A Cold Wind

Well, guess I've been lurking long enough... the literature forum gets my first post!

A Cold Wind

A cold wind chills my heart
as overhead, the moon hides:
masking its torpid light
behind thick black clouds
which close in on my soul.

I walk alone on a path
from an uncertain past
to a future torn by the hands of fate.
Yet still I walk forward,
The thought of you as the master of my action.

And when I fall on my worn legs,
my callous hands shielding my weathered face
I can feel the hurt of your watching eyes
And feel the warmth of your comforting arms
And will myself to walk again.

I never walk alone
with you in my thoughts --
Images of shared passion,
the fountainhead of my love,
which flows endlessly from my battered heart
to the sanctuary of your craving lips.
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Old 06-25-2003, 02:41 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Pretty good. Nice variety of vocab, extremely descriptive.
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Old 06-25-2003, 04:26 PM   #3 (permalink)
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I could actually feel those words. Great job.
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Old 06-25-2003, 04:36 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Very nice work. What a wonderful way to burst onto the scene!
Thank you for a sample of your work. I hope there is more to come.
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Old 06-29-2003, 06:36 AM   #5 (permalink)
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I agree, very good. Please post more, thanks
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