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Old 04-27-2003, 07:12 PM   #3 (permalink)
jdwhite2003
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Well, the last stanza for 'The Last Cry of Masao' was...

I was playing in the street
And you dropped a bomb on me.


...but my creative writing professor didn't like it, so I took it out and forgot to put it back in. Does that work better?

Thanks for the feedback,
JD
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