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Old 10-01-2003, 08:03 PM   #5 (permalink)
chavos
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Location: St. Paul, MN
creepy...

i've heard a story with a similar punch line/hook at the end, but i didn't see it coming until late in the game. you break up the narrative well, using the dreams...though i do get a little lost at points. some more time markers might be needed.

overall, a great story. thanks for sharing it here!
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