Don't get me wrong. I mean no offense, but -
Love poems are
very hard to write. We walk in the footsteps of Shakespeare, no?
Have you ever read his Sonnet 18?
The emotion is wonderful, and always seems fresh to the writer; but the problem is it's all been said before. And almost invariably, said much better.
Again, though, I mean no offense. I write poems much like this myself.
Oh, and good luck with that girlfriend of yours....
-D.S.