This latest poem is tremendously beautiful...but if I may say so, I think the rhythm seems a little forced in some lines. Maybe try:
"Relaxing my soul, I need no longer wait"
"You released my spirit, opened up my heart"
Obviously it can be refined further still, I just wanted to give an idea of what could be done. I don't want to feed lines to you. Aside from those two rhythmic touches, I have to compliment you on your use of rhyme, as well as the sincerity that is in this poem. Kudos to you!
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