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Old 07-23-2003, 11:11 AM   #16 (permalink)
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It loses a little from each post... but it still flows.
Hal in High School were flashbacks - so the next author can or may not flashback - i don't see how the story is hurt too much. The flashback to high school helps place Harvey - and shows why he would go against Hal's "political enemies" to try to talk with Hal, before that bullet cuts in, that is.

Hal doesn't know its actually 2007 until Z tells him. So that solves the present day stuff.... awww... read it again. And write some more. There.
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