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Old 04-06-2011, 12:17 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Your light has vanished from this place

This is a villanelle following the strict, modern form.

"A villanelle has only two rhyme sounds. The first and third lines of the first stanza are rhyming refrains that alternate as the third line in each successive stanza and form a couplet at the close.

A villanelle is nineteen lines long, consisting of five tercets and one concluding quatrain.

The villanelle has no established meter; most 20th-century villanelles use pentameter." (As does this one).

Source: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Villanelle

I've played around with this one for several days now and may include variations (including following the form less strictly) in subsequent posts.


Your light has vanished from this place.
The house is dim and far too still.
The life has vanished from my face.

A darkness falls that gives no grace.
There is no once, no ever will.
Your light has vanished from this place.

Gone is comfort, warm embrace;
this emptiness shall have no fill.
The life has vanished from my face.

What once was right is now disgrace.
What then was love now bitter pill.
Your light has vanished from this place.

The hopes and dreams are all erased.
There is no past, no bright until.
The life has vanished from my face.

What once was cherished now is waste.
So lock the doors and bar the sills.
Your light has vanished from this place;
the life has vanished from my face.

Last edited by HandmeDown; 04-06-2011 at 12:26 PM.. Reason: cited source for verse form; added quotations
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