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Old 06-10-2003, 07:42 PM   #3 (permalink)
redravin40
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Location: With Jadzia
Reminds me a bit of Vacchs stuff.
Very civilized but hard at the same time.
A message with a hammer to drive it home.
You have an interesting character in Z and I would be very interested in any back story you have.
How did this man become a lawbreaker and why?
The relationships are well drawn out and you have a feel for dialog.
You say you don't like to rewrite or edit but that is one of the most important parts of writing.
I think a couple of rewrites with some back story could make this a publishable story.
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