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I like the general idea, but I have one thing that I would change that would make a difference to the dynamic of the composition. I sense you want to give the composition a feeling of depth, of breadth, of spaciousness. Well the fact that the fish, and the underside of the water )is that what it is meant to be?) are so close to the figure in the middle, and to the woman at the side, make it feel cramped. I would move it up quite a length away to stop that from happening. Then, so that the painting is not too stretched out, I would widen the horizontal elements a touch too. Other than that, for so much detail, to stop the scene from becoming too intricate, and too much like a "decorative" work, I'd paint it in a large enough format that would allow the details to not seem to fiddly.
Your drawings have a lightness to them, that I feel you should be cautious about when you move on to paint. Don't load the work too heavily with dark and colour, otherwise it will look like a painted drawing and not a painting in its own right.
Hope it goes well, would love to see the finished product! I wish you success with the work.
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Whether we write or speak or do but look
We are ever unapparent. What we are
Cannot be transfused into word or book.
Our soul from us is infinitely far.
However much we give our thoughts the will
To be our soul and gesture it abroad,
Our hearts are incommunicable still.
In what we show ourselves we are ignored.
The abyss from soul to soul cannot be bridged
By any skill of thought or trick of seeming.
Unto our very selves we are abridged
When we would utter to our thought our being.
We are our dreams of ourselves, souls by gleams,
And each to each other dreams of others' dreams.
Fernando Pessoa, 1918
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