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angelpain · 07-24-2008, 08:03 PM

first, my only comment about everyone's masterpiece is how each felt like a roller coaster ride. from love renewed to loved lost it was heartwarming. so my offer is a poem/song meant for a friend's band. i had original posted my piece on facebook but no rip of said poem had been conducted so i offer this to all my new friends here at TFP .

A little history of said poem. I wrote it right after my ever long relationship with my love we were together for 6 years. And well this was the 2nd try at long distance and it failed. Couldn't balance him living in CAli for 6 months out of the year while I live in Philly. Yet he does own a hose not far from me. In the end he chose Cali over me and well a week or 2 later i met my now present boyfriend. And me and my ex can't ignore 6 years of being in love and his my best friend and vise versa.

I now offer my work to be rip apart and digested:

You've taken my soul away;
There's nothing left for me in this world to call my own anymore.

My flesh is burning away;
My skin is pealing away at the very thought of you placing your hands on my body;

The sirens blazing once again;
A signal flashing in my head to run away;

You've destroyed me for the last time;
Every time I'm around you there's this void left in the space where my heart use to rest;
i hate the person I become when I'm with you;
When we first fell in love it felt as through we were invincible;
Us against the world;
I was a fool to have given you my heart...

Did you really mean it when you said that you loved me?
By now, I've come to the conclusion that is just a game;

I hate the person you turned me into;
This monster that you unleashed on me has changed me for the worse.

In the end, all I want to do is find a way to escape this feeling of agony.
There has to be some way to end this pain.
Some logical solution to end this war inside of me.
But I can't stop myself from loving you no matter the much of a monster you have become.
But I need to start hating you just a bit more to regain my sanity.
I need to go mourn this relationship now
(Fin)

07-24-2008, 08:03 PM	#62 (permalink)
angelpain Upright Location: Somewhere between	first, my only comment about everyone's masterpiece is how each felt like a roller coaster ride. from love renewed to loved lost it was heartwarming. so my offer is a poem/song meant for a friend's band. i had original posted my piece on facebook but no rip of said poem had been conducted so i offer this to all my new friends here at TFP . A little history of said poem. I wrote it right after my ever long relationship with my love we were together for 6 years. And well this was the 2nd try at long distance and it failed. Couldn't balance him living in CAli for 6 months out of the year while I live in Philly. Yet he does own a hose not far from me. In the end he chose Cali over me and well a week or 2 later i met my now present boyfriend. And me and my ex can't ignore 6 years of being in love and his my best friend and vise versa. I now offer my work to be rip apart and digested: You've taken my soul away; There's nothing left for me in this world to call my own anymore. My flesh is burning away; My skin is pealing away at the very thought of you placing your hands on my body; The sirens blazing once again; A signal flashing in my head to run away; You've destroyed me for the last time; Every time I'm around you there's this void left in the space where my heart use to rest; i hate the person I become when I'm with you; When we first fell in love it felt as through we were invincible; Us against the world; I was a fool to have given you my heart... Did you really mean it when you said that you loved me? By now, I've come to the conclusion that is just a game; I hate the person you turned me into; This monster that you unleashed on me has changed me for the worse. In the end, all I want to do is find a way to escape this feeling of agony. There has to be some way to end this pain. Some logical solution to end this war inside of me. But I can't stop myself from loving you no matter the much of a monster you have become. But I need to start hating you just a bit more to regain my sanity. I need to go mourn this relationship now (Fin)