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Old 05-15-2008, 10:13 PM   #8 (permalink)
HedwigStrange
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No problem. I like giving in depth critiques actually... it satisfies my perfectionism/viciousness. So any time you need something reviewed, let me know.

After what you said about the final note, I would drop it entirely as it is now. Go with emphasizing Holts' desire for violence and tie the initial love/romanticism theme back in at that point.

And do I get to see the next draft?
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