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Yukimura · 08-14-2007, 03:20 PM

(My first thought was to write a couple of paragraphs about how in love with him she was, and end it with her seeing the car sliding on the ice behind him. But, I decided I've done way too many freaky depressing endings lately, so I took a different approach.)

The bright glow at the end of his cigarette keeps her gaze drawn a while. She always thought he was so sexy when he smoked, though the smell repulsed her. The smoke hung white in the air, so much thicker than the breath of those walking the street. She found herself swooning over him all over again. It seemed crazy, even to her, to be in love so soon, but neither of them ever questioned it. Some things are just too powerful to be questioned. He waved in to her, and she couldn't stop a somewhat goofy smile from spreading over her face. He sent her a little symbol that to them meant "I love you." She mouthed back to him, "I love you too." Obviously someone on the phone had said something very amusing, because he broke out into one of his big, belly-gripping laughs. She chuckled to herself. He certainly knows how to sap all the romance out of a moment. Yet, somehow that was only more endearing. With every moment their love seemed to grow.

The waiter in the corner was obviously nervous as he watched her. His hands wet the envelope he clutched with sweat. His mouth seemed dry, and he felt his pulse racing. It was just like a thousand times before. He had loved her so long. So many times had he thought about this moment, and tried to make it real. He knew this would be the time he went through with it. He was going to let her know, and they'd live happily ever after. He knew she was dating this new guy now, and he had to act fast.

He walked over to her and started to speak, but something sucked the breath out of him. She had looked over, and he saw her elated smile, and the happiness that seemed to flow out from her eyes. He could see right away the love between them. His words stuck in his throat for too long a moment, and he quickly felt embarassment set in. He ducked his head and walked away. She shrugged and turned her gaze back to her love.

Back in the kitchen, he knew he had lost his chance to be with his love, but somehow, he could not be sad. That smile she had given him, it was like a treasure. It would shine in his memories forever. If she's happy enough to smile like that, I can hold my tongue for eternity.

(After writing this it occurred to me that I could have run in a completely different direction from the way your rules guided by having the server be a secret agent or something of that sort posing as a server and running into an action sequence of a sort as he saw his persuers pass by. I'm pleased with this story though, so I'll stand by it.)

08-14-2007, 03:20 PM	#14 (permalink)
Yukimura Tilted Location: At a computer, obviously.	(My first thought was to write a couple of paragraphs about how in love with him she was, and end it with her seeing the car sliding on the ice behind him. But, I decided I've done way too many freaky depressing endings lately, so I took a different approach.) The bright glow at the end of his cigarette keeps her gaze drawn a while. She always thought he was so sexy when he smoked, though the smell repulsed her. The smoke hung white in the air, so much thicker than the breath of those walking the street. She found herself swooning over him all over again. It seemed crazy, even to her, to be in love so soon, but neither of them ever questioned it. Some things are just too powerful to be questioned. He waved in to her, and she couldn't stop a somewhat goofy smile from spreading over her face. He sent her a little symbol that to them meant "I love you." She mouthed back to him, "I love you too." Obviously someone on the phone had said something very amusing, because he broke out into one of his big, belly-gripping laughs. She chuckled to herself. He certainly knows how to sap all the romance out of a moment. Yet, somehow that was only more endearing. With every moment their love seemed to grow. The waiter in the corner was obviously nervous as he watched her. His hands wet the envelope he clutched with sweat. His mouth seemed dry, and he felt his pulse racing. It was just like a thousand times before. He had loved her so long. So many times had he thought about this moment, and tried to make it real. He knew this would be the time he went through with it. He was going to let her know, and they'd live happily ever after. He knew she was dating this new guy now, and he had to act fast. He walked over to her and started to speak, but something sucked the breath out of him. She had looked over, and he saw her elated smile, and the happiness that seemed to flow out from her eyes. He could see right away the love between them. His words stuck in his throat for too long a moment, and he quickly felt embarassment set in. He ducked his head and walked away. She shrugged and turned her gaze back to her love. Back in the kitchen, he knew he had lost his chance to be with his love, but somehow, he could not be sad. That smile she had given him, it was like a treasure. It would shine in his memories forever. If she's happy enough to smile like that, I can hold my tongue for eternity. (After writing this it occurred to me that I could have run in a completely different direction from the way your rules guided by having the server be a secret agent or something of that sort posing as a server and running into an action sequence of a sort as he saw his persuers pass by. I'm pleased with this story though, so I'll stand by it.) __________________ Maybe the answer is in the very light reflected off our blades. Maybe that's what it means to be this creature known as samurai.