It's funny (or ironic). I agree with half of alot of your sentences.
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Originally Posted by willravel
Before Israel launched it's invasion, the Hezbollah was losing a great deal of support.
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I would agree (I know you don't need to get me to agree) with this:
- Before July 12th, the Hezbollah was losing a great deal of support. OR
- Before Israel responded to the Kidnapping of two Israeli soldiers and border incursion on the part of Hezbollah, the Hezbollah was losing a great deal of support.
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Originally Posted by willravel
Now they are seeing renewed resolve and great support not just in Lebanon but all over the ME, simply because Israel is playing into the role of overzealous, racist military extreemsim.
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On this one I agree with the first half and would rather see the full statement look something like this:
- Now they are seeing renewed resolve and great support not just in Lebanon but all over the ME, simply because Israel is playing right into Hizballa's hand. Or even
- Now they are seeing renewed resolve and great support not just in Lebanon but all over the ME, simply because Israel is willingly playing right into Hizballa's hand.
And for this one...
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Originally Posted by willravel
The disproportionate response over the past month is serving to galvanize the region, and create droves of new enemies for Israel.
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I would take out disproportionate (my opinion) and say something like this:
- The response over the past month is serving to galvanize the region, and create droves new recruits for the enemies for Israel.
And lastly
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Originally Posted by willravel
If I didn't know any better, I'd think Israel were trying to make enemies.
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I think you do know better that you are pretty much on track, however, I think the following is probably more accurate:
- If I didn't know any better, I'd think Israel is not concerned with making new enemies. Or
- If I didn't know any better, I'd think Israel were actually using this as an opportunity to do something that they felt they were eventually going to have to do.