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LHH - it seems you create more of a connection in the mind in the first one - it is my favorite for this reason. Everyone has different writing strengths, maybe for the other scenarios create a character who you can connect to thoughtwise, even if they are not the focal point of the story. With the character who you DO want to be the focus, maybe describe them as they relate and interact with the thought character. I don't know if that made any sense to you whatsoever, but thats just an observation on my part.
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Calling from deep in the heart, from where the eyes can't see and the ears can't hear, from where the mountain trails end and only love can go... ~~~ Three Rivers Hare Krishna
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