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OK, the whole master slave poem completly kicked. The settle undertones blened very well with the overtones that they were also most one. one of your better works I've read.
However; What happen with this last one? it's so unlike your work, it's messy, unfocused, and dry. not one of your better works. I can barely read into it what your trying to convay.
but I do enjoy this passage:
Bow not in worship before the grand alter of your own God
Drink from the cup of silver laced in your own seed
Hold with you your own thunder staff or lightening rod
Allow it to drain and refill you as you continue to bleed
didn't mean to be harsh or anything. your still a far better poet then I am. just voiceing my opinion.
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One is filled with tax evaders, blackmailers and threats to society.
The other is for housing prisoners.
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