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this 2nd drawing is a definite improvement in relation to your first. In the first drawing your shading I think is too hard/angular, maybe a softer pencil would help you make a softer drawing. The 2nd drawing you haven't done such a marked shading and it makes the skin look more realistic. Your proportions seem a lot better in this one too. My only comment on the 2nd one now is that you need more fine detail to make it look human. You know, the glint in the eyes, the flick of a few eyelashes, a stray hair on the eyebrow, that sort of thing. The iris is the coloured part of the eye, I think what someone meant before is that since you don't accent the pupil (the little dark bit/hole)of the eye it looses a little of the detail. Eyes can really make a drawing and if you take some extra time to look really carefully at an eye then you'll see there is a lot more to it than you're drawing at the moment. Good luck, you're on the right track!
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Whether we write or speak or do but look
We are ever unapparent. What we are
Cannot be transfused into word or book.
Our soul from us is infinitely far.
However much we give our thoughts the will
To be our soul and gesture it abroad,
Our hearts are incommunicable still.
In what we show ourselves we are ignored.
The abyss from soul to soul cannot be bridged
By any skill of thought or trick of seeming.
Unto our very selves we are abridged
When we would utter to our thought our being.
We are our dreams of ourselves, souls by gleams,
And each to each other dreams of others' dreams.
Fernando Pessoa, 1918
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