i'm new to tilted lit. not too sure of ettiquette / practices here, so forgive me if i'm off base.
i love this line:
"Like toes in a boot, he was oppressed."
i think you could make his failure even greater.
maybe have the sandals get made, get super popluar, but he goes blind and can never see the toes by the millions that he brought about. mmmm, i dunno... then you miss out on the "guit trip" line - which is kinda funny.
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doodle
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