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As rain falls through leaves
Sky sweet rumbling outside
I’m so happy to finally drown in you
That is such a great summary of the poem, Cellophanedeity - although I'm not sure what you meant by "fixing" the first one... what is it about it that you don't like?
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Calling from deep in the heart, from where the eyes can't see and the ears can't hear, from where the mountain trails end and only love can go... ~~~ Three Rivers Hare Krishna
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