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Originally Posted by FngKestrel
Nice to see the new additions Augi!
A small form nitpick:
"He breifly stared at the lines and lines of scripture"
Spelling of "briefly".
Also, I know you're working with past and present tense storytelling, but I have to say that the present tense feels a little awkward and hard to read. Maybe that's just me.
Other than that, love the new stuff.  |
It has been a while since I can't find my notes of how the story is being told, but when I add the dates of certain events in it should being to clear up, I hope. And just so you know, it is a story being told by Jake, and the beginning is to be in present and everything else is to be in past. When the intercalary chapters get in there it will be whatever is convenient to express what happens in the world related to a computer.
I just found out that Whitey, my English teacher, has been saying and
spelling "Intercavalry" wrong and that the actual word he might have been trying for was
intercalary. TO think that he is an English teacher! However, intercalary does not fit with what the dictionary defines: added days to the calendar as February 29th is every 4 years. I guess these will be contrapuntal chapters but I like the imaginary term intercavalry better...