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With what asaris said, your composition sounds very trite with no relative clauses [ laquel, dont, qui/que] at all, and beginning every sentence with "Il/elle verb..." Try spicing it up a bit with some inversions, relative clauses, and use more sophisticated vocabulary.
BTW, what movie is this ? just wondering.
Bon chance,
keyshawn
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