ergdork

Really interesting - very dreamlike on both. I'm some what torn because of that. I like the someone discontinuous, internal feel to the stories. They seem to play with rhythm and don't necessarily stick to a continuous chain, which I like.

I like the "unsettling" flow to the paragraphs. I don't feel that much I read disrupts me internally, or "gets" to me. This does, and I like it. I think it furthers the unsettling feelings the characters are experiencing. I have some trouble with the way some of the sentances are constructed. Its hard to say what exactly I mean. The best example I can come up with is the first sentance:

"The woods stood staring across at our house when I was very young."

The last bit - "when I was very young" - just doesn't seem to fit quite right, and I think that bit somehow conflicts with the "unsettling flow" that I do like!

Not sure if this makes sense at all, or if it even has merit. I'm a computer programmer! :-) Btw - I'm sorry you lost all your old work!