skier

I found the light sources very interesting in this one. first, the Flash from the camera- so basically the viewer is the light source. The lamp in the corner i think has posed some difficulty in identifying highlights. The main thing that was bugging me about this drawing that was revealed by the photo is that I viewed it as you two standing and kissing, rather than laying down. I guess that's how it's meant to be seen, but a few problems developed during that translation.

1. nwlinkvxd's Shirt. It looks as though you are pulling it towards yourself to kiss him- but the shadows and highlights used make it look like it was in the photo- flat and unmoving. This isn't congruent to how it should look if you were standing up. In the #1 circled area this is especially so. There shouldn't be any of that shirt so far in the foreground. It would work if you shaded the shirt to seem in shadow, farther away, or even overlapped it with a portion of your other arm.
2. Light source. Almost all of your drawing is consistent with the light source being just above and to the right of the viewer, with the exception of #2. the darkness there implies that nwlinkvxd's cheekbone is sticking out, causing a cavity in that area. It gives the impression of a "famished" look- *tries to find right words to describe* Like you haven't eaten for weeks and there is no flesh rounding the face out. As for shadows created by the lamp- They should be darker/more prominent at #6, and perhaps less so at #5.
3. nwlinkvxd's head tilt. add more shadow to the blue circled area to give depth to it. As you go furthur down his head to his chin etc. it should get darker as it is getting farther away from the light source as well as being hidden by his shirt. it'll tilt his head towards the viewer more and add shape to his face.
4. Your hand- while similar to the photo, It would be nice to give the hand more definition by adding contrast- in between the knuckles, slow gradient on the right side, highlights on the left. Also, while the hand is a fist, the thumb can't fit underneath it- it needs to come out at an angle. Try making a fist yourself and check it out.
5. nwlinkvxd's ear. the angle is wrong- ideally it should either follow the jawline, or be more upright

Ummm yep. I think that's everything. I like how you had your hair blowing in the wind.

edit: maybe I should've added the picture :P

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