I would like to introduce myself to the person that came up with the five paragraph essay, torture them in three different ways, and then conclude their life.
It might just be a matter of writing style, but I doubt you'd have time to make the changes I'd recommend... and why should you make them, anyway? Here's the two big big ones:
NeoRete is right about that being a seriously weird way to cite the articles.
Cut the second sentence of the first paragraph.
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