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Slightly morbid love poem
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10-29-2004, 03:37 PM
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Glory's Sun
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It's pretty good. Only thing I would say is that the "And yet" part gets a little confusing..try adding some punctuation to that part. Hyphens or semi-colons or something to make it a little clearer.
other than that it's good stuff. Morbid is good.
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