well, when i started out, i didn't want people to say "your stuff is ok", when it wasn't, i dont' want to be lied to or have watered down comments, because you can't learn from them, so if my stuff was shit, i want to be told it's shit, so i can take a second look and try to recognize why it sucks...so i've learned to be harsh because it's helped me rethink things i do...and if you're wanting in the business you're going to get hammered by people 100x's more harsh than i am...so, in all fairness i should have given better criticism along with calling it annoying, and having horrid colors..which i will do in a minute...but if i continue to be bitched at for being harsh with points, i'm just going to leave this forum, because this is a reoccuring thing that has been happening to me....but that's a whole different story...on to in depth crits...
ok, the first peice is very sloppy, with the very rough squiggly lines, lens flare, and the type on the side...my suggestion for this peice is to take out the white squiggles, and remove the text on the side, but place the text back in, in a uniform, yet more dynamic way following the grid, because the text as it is now looks like it is in a newsletter, not a desktop image...also, for the images behind the decap, i would maybe guassian blur them to the back if you want to keep them because they are contrasting with the rest of the image....
the second peice is my most disliked peice..i can see what some people would like this because of the background, which very hard on the eyes, and it looks like you would need 3d glasses for it, which is also a no-no...my suggestion for this peice is to maybe take the background down to a bar like the first wallpaper has, and fade the both sides of the bar to black, with a possible tv line pattern in it, changing the hue/saturation could do some good too....
i don't have anymore time to comment on any other peices, but, take my suggesions or leave them. i dont' care.
thanks for the comment on my website, i think there is a fine art factor in my stuff, because it's what i did before i became a designer, so i can see how it could entwine themselves together somewhat...
Last edited by gallopingwanker; 10-15-2004 at 10:13 AM..
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