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Esen 11-20-2005 07:27 PM

Serpent
 
serpentine lashes placed below the brow
shaving away life from the eternal flow of the evolutionary mind
bound behind the eye its tail spins and flickers
raising its toungue to guard away dust and tears
a circling fan of iris and bloody blue
boiling within a glass contaner capsized;
the negotiating eye
never aroused
only dazed to utter levels of confusion and latency
crowds are parted by the wind that is spread by the movement of hand and scale
a deep carving of talons that rake accross the only pure thoughts that can be found lingering upon your face
when the dragon awakes emotion becomes enslaved
raging buckets of sweat diing into pores of whispered promises
we are now hardened.
let the serpent dance.

X3N0 11-26-2005 10:59 AM

I really liked the continuing metaphor of an argument being a snake, and the depth of you describing it from beginning to end.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Chauncey
the negotiating eye
never aroused
only dazed to utter levels of confusion and latency

This perfectly described the humor of how most arguments are never logical.

Esen 12-04-2005 02:02 PM

Thanks a lot X3no

i'm glad you were able to make something out of it.

X3N0 12-05-2005 10:45 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Esen
Thanks a lot X3no

i'm glad you were able to make something of it

No problem !

You should post more, I really like your work.


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