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Warped and Twisted...
My eyes are closed and my hands are fisted,
Deep inside I'm warped and twisted. Noone knows how I really feel, All my dreams never to reveal. I'm not special, I'm not gifted, I'm just me, and I'm warped and twisted. Noone cares about how I feel, I've been crushed under another heel. Call my mind, the number's unlisted, Lost in someone so warped and twisted, I've locked my heart with a heavy seal, My pain and anger forever to conceal. Comments are welcome... |
The first three lines of each stanza are strong, but, as is especially the case in the first stanza, the last line feels contrived, and it breaks the rhythm. I like the ideas though, but what would happen if you expressed yourself more in the last line instead of contriving a rhyme?
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