Dizzied Lights
 

This was written in about 30 seconds so it needs work. Any advice is welcome. I wrote this while thinking about past friendships and relationships.


Blank stares and empty eyes,
World passing at a million miles
Cigarette smoke and bitter coffee,
Right where I want to be.

Frayed shirt sleeves and dirty fingernails,
Faceless person singing tragic pitfalls
Eyes tired and weary,
Right where I want to be.

Crystal air and numb toes,
Frizzled hair and untied shoes
Neon lights begging to be seen,
Raindrops bouncing off of window panes
Right where I want to be.

Blurred faces and mangled voices,
Dogs barking and children laughing
Detached from reality,
Right where I want to be.

Thoghts and memories swirling,
Visions of you, toying
Bitter betrayals, Joyful revivals,
The fall from grace, the empty space
Standing still, focused on your memory-
Right where I want to be.

I like 30-second stuff

eventually, I do go back and edit - not really right away at all though - I wait - sometimes months or years to tighten things up. I don't think there's any hurry...

Like I said in the journal, I like this! Thanks for sharing again :D

The more I read it...the more I like it. This musta just jumped into your head and grabbed you. I love when that happens. I think thats where a lot of us want to be.

Asta!!

I'm the opposite, the more I read it, the more I hate it. Heh..