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CheeseButtons 03-28-2004 09:27 PM

Dissembled
 
Your right hand is outstretched
an offering of friendship
Your right hand consoles me when I'm hurt
catches me when I fall
Your right hand comforts my mind
when I've lost my way
Your right hand does no wrong
a lifetime of trust
Where is your left?
I need your hand now more than ever
a crisis has become me
a knife in my back
Your right hand moves to alleviate
but I find your left hand at last
holding the knife, that has beset me

bad30th 04-10-2004 04:40 AM

I really like that. Nice work, thanks.

vonstalhein 04-10-2004 05:39 AM

I like the sentiment, but the rhythm feels a bit stilted to me.

ForgottenKnight 04-14-2004 10:00 AM

Ouch... the two sides of reality exposed... I know how that feels... Thanks for sharing.


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