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scarebearjinx · 04-22-2003, 09:51 PM

sorrows lost
my will is gone
forever unseen
i wait for dawn

craddle robbed
i'm thrown to hell
a broken freedom
i cast this spell

all alone
beauty forsaken
flood the plains
your life is taken

chained and shackled
a dead weight soul
tears of blood
slave to a troll

Atropos4 · 04-26-2003, 11:32 AM

wow! I really like that! BDSM comes to mind

phoenix1002 · 04-27-2003, 06:49 PM

That's really cool... it really got images into my head. I really like the first stanza, about waiting for dawn after will is gone. Something about it clicks in my head.

jdwhite2003 · 04-27-2003, 09:06 PM

Very nice. In the last stanza, "a dead weight soul" seems to stumble over itself, like dead weight, but that may be what you are looking for

Cheers,
JD

Eowyn_Vala · 05-02-2003, 08:56 PM

I really enjoyed reading this. It spoke to me and I just had to tell you great job!

04-22-2003, 09:51 PM	#1 (permalink)
scarebearjinx Psycho Location: in a deep, dark hole where rainbow creatures attack me to eat my fingernails.	my curse sorrows lost my will is gone forever unseen i wait for dawn craddle robbed i'm thrown to hell a broken freedom i cast this spell all alone beauty forsaken flood the plains your life is taken chained and shackled a dead weight soul tears of blood slave to a troll

04-26-2003, 11:32 AM	#2 (permalink)
Atropos4 Think about it Location: North Carolina	wow! I really like that! BDSM comes to mind __________________ Minds are like parachutes. They work better open. "If I were Hermione, I would have licked his pantleg."

04-27-2003, 06:49 PM	#3 (permalink)
phoenix1002 Psycho Location: lost	That's really cool... it really got images into my head. I really like the first stanza, about waiting for dawn after will is gone. Something about it clicks in my head. __________________ I'd rather be climbing... I approach college much like a recovering alcoholic--one day at a time...

05-02-2003, 08:56 PM	#5 (permalink)
Eowyn_Vala Insane Location: There's no place like home..	I really enjoyed reading this. It spoke to me and I just had to tell you great job! __________________ Cain: I know what you're doing. I've lead troops into battle before. DG: And, how am I doing? Cain: Well, there's less hugging when I do it

04-27-2003, 09:06 PM	#4 (permalink)
jdwhite2003 Upright	Very nice. In the last stanza, "a dead weight soul" seems to stumble over itself, like dead weight, but that may be what you are looking for Cheers, JD