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Esen · 11-20-2003, 03:06 AM

Too damn early

my teeth drag me to the sink
begging to be scrubbed and awakened,
the seals of bubbling cleansers breaking upon my fingers
falling is the cap
constricting is the tube
unleashed comes the paste,
a whirlwind of balance totters at my mind
instructing my nervous system to just focus and scream.
instruments long and bristled
marching to the exposed bone
polishing away the grime
the carcasses of nourishment
refreshing the breath that carries me to the shower
why the hell arn't I under the covers.

tecoyah · 11-20-2003, 05:52 PM

singed by the dragons breath
tarter tattered by flossy line
noxious residual film of sleep
floridate the stench of slumber
kill a billion bastards with a swig
spew the carcasses into the waiting ceramic graves

as always, you create fun inspiration, thx chauncey

taliendo · 11-20-2003, 11:27 PM

as an avid brusher, I thoroughly enjoyed this. thanks for your creativity.

ForgottenKnight · 11-21-2003, 12:28 AM

That's origional... I like it! And you're right... it's too early... it always is...

J.R.V.A. · 11-24-2003, 09:26 PM

Wake up its sunday. Good stuff as always, thanks

torgone · 11-26-2003, 08:07 PM

I like this!
The depth of thought when not fully awake is very seminal.
Good post.

vonstalhein · 11-27-2003, 10:26 AM

Waking up is certainly worth writing a poem of this calibre about

basmoq · 11-30-2003, 08:04 PM

Interesting, must now go brush teeth

Jadey · 11-30-2003, 10:29 PM

Chauncey that was pretty good. I thought "my teeth drag ,me to the sink" was funny.

11-20-2003, 03:06 AM	#1 (permalink)
Esen TFPer formaly known as Chauncey Location: North East	Too damn early Too damn early my teeth drag me to the sink begging to be scrubbed and awakened, the seals of bubbling cleansers breaking upon my fingers falling is the cap constricting is the tube unleashed comes the paste, a whirlwind of balance totters at my mind instructing my nervous system to just focus and scream. instruments long and bristled marching to the exposed bone polishing away the grime the carcasses of nourishment refreshing the breath that carries me to the shower why the hell arn't I under the covers. __________________ ~Esen What is everyone doing in my room?

11-20-2003, 05:52 PM	#2 (permalink)
tecoyah Illusionary	singed by the dragons breath tarter tattered by flossy line noxious residual film of sleep floridate the stench of slumber kill a billion bastards with a swig spew the carcasses into the waiting ceramic graves as always, you create fun inspiration, thx chauncey __________________ Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha

11-20-2003, 11:27 PM	#3 (permalink)
taliendo Insane Location: an indelible crawl through the gutters	as an avid brusher, I thoroughly enjoyed this. thanks for your creativity. __________________ -LIFE IS ABSURD-

11-21-2003, 12:28 AM	#4 (permalink)
ForgottenKnight Jesus Freak Location: Following the light...	That's origional... I like it! And you're right... it's too early... it always is... __________________ "People say I'm strange, does that make me a stranger?"

11-24-2003, 09:26 PM	#5 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	Wake up its sunday. Good stuff as always, thanks __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

11-26-2003, 08:07 PM	#6 (permalink)
torgone What's beyond psycho? Location: Still out there	I like this! The depth of thought when not fully awake is very seminal. Good post. __________________ "Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." Groucho Marx

11-27-2003, 10:26 AM	#7 (permalink)
vonstalhein Insane Location: Where You Live.	Waking up is certainly worth writing a poem of this calibre about __________________ No Win No Fee

11-30-2003, 08:04 PM	#8 (permalink)
basmoq It's a girly girl! Location: OH, USA	Interesting, must now go brush teeth

11-30-2003, 10:29 PM	#9 (permalink)
Jadey This Space For Rent Location: Davenport, Iowa	Chauncey that was pretty good. I thought "my teeth drag ,me to the sink" was funny.