ForgottenKnight

When trying to write this haiku I took two approaches that led me to two very similar haikus about the same thing, but from two different perspectives. I couldn't decide which one was better, and liked them both, so I kept and named both of them.


Lonely Woods

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Wood’s Words

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taliendo

I really like these, the second one especially. "I, a lonely wood." good stuff.

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ForgottenKnight

I just found out today that the humanities for engineers program I'm in is having a poetry writing contest. I can submit any type of poem, and will be submitting multiple poems if it's allowed. I'm curious as to which ones do you guys think I should submit? Any and all feedback is much appriciated. And once again, thank you all for reading my work!

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Dreamy Memories

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minyn

How many poems can you submit?

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"Don't compromise yourself, you're all you've got." -Janis Joplin

ForgottenKnight

They never said, and it doesn't say anything on the information page I have for it. But then, it doesn't even give a deadline for submission.

[Edit]I seem to have a little while due to them not giving out prizes until during E-days in April. But the sooner I get them submitted, the better.[/Edit]

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fallen_angel

Wow i just read forgotten and it was amazing. i love those kind of storys where the maiden gets rescued by the handsom night. but never have i heard of such treachery. if i were the maiden i would be in love with you and for saving me i would devote my life to you. i hope this woman you speak of turns back to you and realizes what a great man you are. for you have both the courage, spirit and compasionto sate a million women, and you giving your heart to one is the best present you could ever give another.

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

ForgottenKnight

Thank you, fallen_angel, for touching me with such kind words. I have learned many times, in many ways, that the world is full of treachery. But then, things are never as they appear to be. Sometimes the princess does not always wish or need to be rescued. I wish I could save a million women in circumstances like the maiden’s. But even if I only save one, it would make me the happiest man alive.

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J.R.V.A.

Wow.... You say so much with so little... This is pretty damn good, Thanks

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And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart

fallen_angel

To my sweet prince in shining armor,

My birth name is Sarah ( meaning god's princess). Trust me the night we talked you saved me. and i thank you for that, i dont even think i could express how much talking with you has helped me and saved me. thankyou

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

taliendo

If I were you I would think about submitting something with a little age on it. In Candlelight is one of my favorites that you've posted here on this board. If you choose something that's been around for a bit, you'll at least know whether or not you like the piece, and if you've needed to brush up any lines.

On the other hand, especially if you can submit multiple poems, I would consider several of the haikus. Wood's Words and Dreamy Memories are my favorites, but submit which ever you like best.

Best of luck!

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minyn

Your voice is being heard. Now what are you going to say or rather, what are you going to do?

=)

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"Don't compromise yourself, you're all you've got." -Janis Joplin

ForgottenKnight

Your Foxy Smile

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fallen_angel

*psst* anyone else think NiceGuy has a thing for my smile?? *giggle* I sure hope so. . .

Love the poem, but watch out mines gonna be a lot better. . .

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

ForgottenKnight

Go to Disney World!?!

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minyn

thinking you need to add dedications, if anything, to make people smile.

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God’s Princess

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Nothing Can Change

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minyn

yup, didnt realize how much i needed to hear that until someone said it. thanks. i really appreciate it

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"Woke up this morning with a blue moon in my eye"
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"Don't compromise yourself, you're all you've got." -Janis Joplin

mirevolver

In regards to "Nothing Can Change," I have only heard the story through word of mouth. But from what I have heard, the one who said such bitter words had no right to make the accusations made.

Minyn, from meeting you myself, I know that the unkind words said about you are completly false.

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fallen_angel

Thank you so much. you have helped me in ways no one can ever begin to repay. this poem is so beautiful it brought tears to my eyes. i shall cherish this always. thank you

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from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

bacon_masta

i really enjoyed reading your work. definite props for excellent word choice and flow, the first poem was amazing

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Thinking of You

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minyn

Thanks Mire. its been ugly but i have friends standing behind me and it makes it a bit esaier

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"Don't compromise yourself, you're all you've got." -Janis Joplin

ForgottenKnight

Thank You all for your kind comments. They mean so much to me. I am thankful that I have this community to share what I write on the little bits of free time I somehow manage to scrounge up.

What matters the most in life is the ways in which we touch others'. This is just another way for me to touch others' lives in what I hope is a positive manor.

Thanks again for taking a few minutes of your precious time to read my work.

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losthellhound

Ive read all of your work, and felt that I had to post.. All your poems are strikingly beautifull, yet at the same time I feel like a voyeur reading them. They are powerful glipses into yourself..

I wish I could write here what I truly mean, and dedicate as I truly would.. but obfuscation is a gift not easily thrown away

thanks for the poems

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Angel

Thank you for continuing to share your beautiful work and talent with us Niceguy. You are an inspiration.

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ForgottenKnight

Alone

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taliendo

Keep strong by your faith, my friend - it is all too often in the times of despair that we find beauty all around us. I hope that you find peace and joy in this quiet solitude that you have been given.

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diddagirl

Thank you for sharing your beatiful work NiceGuy. It is truly touching and a comfort to know other's feel the same way.

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ForgottenKnight

Poetry Contest Update:
My poem, Affairs of Dragons and Wizards, was one of the winners for the best Reflective Poem category in the Herbst Program of Humanities poetry contest, and was announced today at an e-days kickoff reception.
One of my other poems would have won another category (I think it was a Haiku... that will be verified later) but they were only allowing each person to win in one category, thus not letting me win in multiple categories.

Also, I apologize for not posting any poems or other works here in a while. I have been busy with other things. Hopefully soon I will write some more to share with you guys.

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Angel

Bravo! Congrats Niceguy!
I knew you would win no matter what poem you submitted. Your work is worthy of recognition.

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ariekitten

wow this is some really good stuff.

i think everyone goes thru this....really and truly, just most people dont make it known....
i personally feel this way about a coupla people, but one in particular thats out of reach....*sigh* dont give up on life though, there are so many wonderful things awaiting you! and thanks for sharing! keep up the beautiful work!

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ForgottenKnight

Thank you all for your kind responses.

And now, another haiku. It's been a while since I've had any modivation to write anything more that's ended up being worth keeping. Tonight I wrote this one while at fencing, and thought it worth sharing.

Betrayed

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amonkie

Your honesty and self examination make your words all the more moving. I hope you'll soon find inspiration for some additions. Thanks for directing me here

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Calling from deep in the heart, from where the eyes can't see and the ears can't hear, from where the mountain trails end and only love can go... ~~~ Three Rivers Hare Krishna

ForgottenKnight

Been a while since I've written anything worth keeping or sharing. Been spending more time thinking about some changes I might make to previous pieces to make them better. But I thought of this while at work and had to write it down.

Modern Guillotine

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Dedicated to the paper cutter at my work...

Please post comments

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amonkie

A moment of silence in tribute to a once whole piece of paper...

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ForgottenKnight

I would like to contribute more to my literature thread than I have been recently, but I've had a bit of writter's block. Sorry. Hopefully it will end soon and I'll be able to get back to sharing my work!

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MojoRisin

My we have alot to learn about love

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ForgottenKnight

I BROKE MY WRITER'S BLOCK TODAY!!!

Evil Within

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