Why'd You Have To Go And Be My Best Friend? - Tilted Forum Project Discussion Community

K-Wise · 09-12-2003, 10:33 PM

I just copied & pasted it as is from another site where I posted it at. It's a pretty long one though but I think it just might be my best work yet. It's a little more like poetry than rap with long winded lines formatted to depict my every emotion and provide some what of a visual picture of the events as they happen and creating a canvas for my exact feelings to be splashed upon. Here it is

Why'd Ya Have To Go And Be My Best Friend?"
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I started writtin this rhyme cause I had a madd crush. Then stopped cause of some sad shit(explained in the rhyme) One a my best friends started goin through the same predicament I was in. I re-wrote this...and finished it for him with hopes that it would help him (and anyone else who ever felt that way) cope. This is more like lookin for the right words to say rather than focusin on the actual rhyme tip. Kinda long but here it is yo.....

Why'd Ya Have To Go And Be My Best Friend?

Yo check it day one introduction to a forbiden affection 4 a loved one//Taboo when “love you” became between 2 closely friended someones//A painful circumfrence of a never-endin cycle between “I love you” No! “I like you” confused dumbness causin numbness due to how it was and how it wasn’t//She got my heart racin//Constant debatin caught up in that infatuation I felt the hurt and frustration of the painful realization that she ain’t want me and it’s a feelin that I hated//Recent conversations played their part to makin feelins which were dead awaken//Writtin madd and concentratin every written statement neva seperatin//Whats real from what is truth serenade of a confused youth as living proof//Of my affection I considered her a blessin sweetest confection it was only right that I was confessin all my love but how to do it was the question?//I was scared to death and open to any suggestions//On my mind 24/7 so stressin//My eyes caressin every soft expression while rejection only fueled my pain in resurrection thus attackin me from all directions//See do I really wanna grab for sloppy seconds from ya asshole man who's showin no signs a steppin WTF was I expectin?!//Ignorin others at the tiny chance we could be lovers in denial all the while you were torn for another thus I suffered; silently though all inside of me had ruptured//You loved me once and made it blatant but I hesitated when the feelings situated//Lord knows we mighta made it when you were vacant if I hadn’t waited now it’s wasted and I have to face it God I hate it!//Wrote this rhyme in that lonely time and saved it now I wish I’d seranaded before the year had faded and you & I had seperated in slow paces to distant places where our faces refused to recognize at how our eyes displayed it//Never such a strangeness as a love so nameless I had to fake it due to situations gettin complicated//It became a struggle when I’d hug you every muscle screamed “I love you” just a couple a thousand times if just our minds could intertwine and hear how mine had spoken of you//In a slightly troubled mumble vaugely subtle with an abysmal puddle full of tears at how it all ended with a shovel...LOST!...unable to rebuttle only slowly crumble as it tumbled down-hill and cut on every rock n jagged rubble//Left me puzzled; had it lasted it’d become that of a bubble floatin over needles up and down like every curve upon my knuckles//Thus I’ve nothin left to do but stumble as my heart is ripped apart and pummeled//The worst kinda secret when your unable to conceal it couldn’t keep it only a matter of time before a friend a mine revealed it to her face she was confused and I could feel it//Immediate weirdness came and veered it’s ugly head that you could see in our appearance things have changed it’s not the same and I had feared this since the beginning and now the ending is at it’s nearest//First came the avoidance where our voices became nothing more than noises and ya didn’t seem to notice when my being was at it’s brokest was it confusion or annoyance?//Of all things mere moments would’ve aquainted me to know this but, no-it’s more like cat n mouse with rat traps and poisons//Left with only wonderin why the letters stopped comin in and now your running away the light a day has come to thunderin//I’m coverin my face with smiles to hide whats under them but inside I’ve all but died in slumberin//It’s come to this I called your number and the words “It’s Cris” had never left my tounge again//Because....I called and finally got an answer but there was no banter only soft chatter of you tellin ya sis she shouldn’t have answered and you were madd at her//As if it couldn’t have gotten sadder all I heard next was a click and nothing more of you there after(Thus concludes the final chapter)//No grudges I’ve gotten better and saved every letter we’d written together forever in my subconcious to be honest I’ll never forget her//I was honored to have had you that long though I wish it had been longer I’ve grown stronger since then but way back when I was never fonder......

So why’d ya have to go and be my best friend? If you wasn’t we mighta been on the phone this minute but if you wasn’t these feelins mighta never existed ya voice whispas in my mind from time to time and I’m goin miss it...

Why’d ya have to go and be my best friend? I loved you......
I've nothing left to do but wonder......why?...I wonder....

Hope you felt it. I'm really proud of this piece and I really put a lot of thought into it. By all means please be brutally honest. If you don't like it please tell me why and give me an explanation. The format is really weird to read I'm not very good at that sort of thing that was the more traditionally structure for writing rap lyrics when I first started posting them on the internet. I hope it wasn't too much of a burden. Thank you very much for reading though. If you like this one I will post more when I can.

Asta!!

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J.R.V.A. · 09-13-2003, 05:35 AM

Yea, I like it. I could almost here it being done while I was reading it. It's pretty cool. Thanks for postingit, please post some more.

Journeyman · 09-22-2003, 06:07 PM

I dunno if it was supposed to be internally voiced out as a sort of solo rap artist but that's the way it went in my head, and it was great. Biggest poem I ever read without having to break.

K-Wise · 09-22-2003, 09:30 PM

Really? Thanx man I really appreciate that.

Asta!!

amonkie · 10-24-2004, 07:17 PM

Though this was originally posted before my time, I really like it! The fact you wrote it for rap makes it all the more powerful.... You're angry and frustrated - the words aren't meant to come across relaxing and soothing. The mental pictures you created were really original - especially the bubbles on needles across your knuckles. I could really see those things happening. Can't wait to see more!

K-Wise · 10-24-2004, 07:45 PM

Oh wow that was fast. Thank you very much. I liked that line too. For a traditional style of rap people thought it was a bit much and they thought it winded on for too long. Probably true but I still like it and I said just about everything I needed to say. I have other raps. I've never thought about posting them though. Maybe I will just so I can have more posts in this forum. I still wanna try writing more poetry though. I feel that in one way or another my raps really are poetry but most people don't feel that way and because of it won't read them in such a way. They'll read actual poetry thats called poetry though. I'm happy to do both if I have to. Thanx again for reading. Tommorow I'm gonna start reading all these posts that have 0 replies and see if I can reply to them. And check the second page for them too. I imagine it has to feel a little empty to post something and have no one feel the need to say anything about it. I can't imagine how far down this old one was.

Asta!!

heather99 · 10-27-2004, 11:55 AM

Hi, you are right I posted a couple with zero replies. Good luck to you. Well done

irseg · 10-27-2004, 12:59 PM

Does anybody here speak jive?

K-Wise · 10-27-2004, 01:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by heather99

Hi, you are right I posted a couple with zero replies. Good luck to you. Well done

PM them to me and I'll be happy to read them.

Asta!!

Seer666 · 11-01-2004, 11:15 PM

First off, let me just say, I really don't care for rap as a whole. That said, let me also say if more people did it that way I would be it's biggest fan. Fucking brillint! Keep posting, I REALLY am looking forward to more of your work.

K-Wise · 11-02-2004, 05:02 AM

Thanx man ya dunno what that means to me. I must add though that I'm inspired by emcees who are equally as good and better than me and touch on similar subject matters so if you're willing to try them out, there are emcees out there you will love. I'll dig up some more lyrics to post later on today. While you're waiting you can read Water Color Woman just a little ways down the page...not a rap but a fairly good poem by my standards.

Asta!!

mokle · 12-22-2004, 09:51 PM

Hey man,

Another good song you got there. You've got a great talent for writing poetry. As a rap song, you most recent lyrics flowed better in my head, but nobody can flow lyrics like their creator

Have you ever laid down some of these lyrics on a simple drum beat? Perhaps you should record some of these songs, even if just on your computer.

Look forward to your next song.

K-Wise · 12-23-2004, 04:39 AM

Actually no..not these songs. I don't have a computer I can record on anymore. I used to have some old little rhymes here and there recorded in RM and WMV format but I lost the page they were uploaded on as well as the computer I had originally made them on...it broke. I'd just get beats off of MP3.com...back then there were a lot of guys making great beats and letting people use them for free...not so much anymore though...least not on MP3.com last time I checked. This is a Mac and it's not mine so I can't record on it. If I ever get another PC I'll probably get Cool Edit or some other recording programs and throw tracks down and get a Soundclick.com page but until then they're just lyrics. Me and my friend both have strong aspirations to record music we just don't have the tools at our disposal. He's been saving up to buy things little by little...he said we should have everything we need within the next two years haha. Last I checked he had 200 bucks saved up for speakers. Be nice if we knew of a studio and a producer but most people just have to do it on their own these days...which takes lots of time and patience...and keeping your skills sharp during that time.

You're right the other does kind of flow better but I can also manage to flow those lyrics pretty well as well. Most can't see how but my style is very weird and because of my influences and practice I've almost perfected how to read my rhymes...I just have to find the right beat and I can spit that one word for word. Not sure if I have any other pieces I'd deem worthy enough to post here but I can check...or write another one...or add more to a previous one heh. Sorry I don't have more lyrics for you to read right now..I promise I'll look until then I guess you could read Water Color Woman but it's ventured off to page 2 already hmm I'll dig it up for you....Okay here it is Water Color Woman

Glad you enjoyed my lyrics hope you enjoy my poetry as well.

Asta!!

09-12-2003, 10:33 PM	#1 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	Why'd You Have To Go And Be My Best Friend? I just copied & pasted it as is from another site where I posted it at. It's a pretty long one though but I think it just might be my best work yet. It's a little more like poetry than rap with long winded lines formatted to depict my every emotion and provide some what of a visual picture of the events as they happen and creating a canvas for my exact feelings to be splashed upon. Here it is Why'd Ya Have To Go And Be My Best Friend?" _ I started writtin this rhyme cause I had a madd crush. Then stopped cause of some sad shit(explained in the rhyme) One a my best friends started goin through the same predicament I was in. I re-wrote this...and finished it for him with hopes that it would help him (and anyone else who ever felt that way) cope. This is more like lookin for the right words to say rather than focusin on the actual rhyme tip. Kinda long but here it is yo..... Why'd Ya Have To Go And Be My Best Friend? Yo check it day one introduction to a forbiden affection 4 a loved one//Taboo when “love you” became between 2 closely friended someones//A painful circumfrence of a never-endin cycle between “I love you” No! “I like you” confused dumbness causin numbness due to how it was and how it wasn’t//She got my heart racin//Constant debatin caught up in that infatuation I felt the hurt and frustration of the painful realization that she ain’t want me and it’s a feelin that I hated//Recent conversations played their part to makin feelins which were dead awaken//Writtin madd and concentratin every written statement neva seperatin//Whats real from what is truth serenade of a confused youth as living proof//Of my affection I considered her a blessin sweetest confection it was only right that I was confessin all my love but how to do it was the question?//I was scared to death and open to any suggestions//On my mind 24/7 so stressin//My eyes caressin every soft expression while rejection only fueled my pain in resurrection thus attackin me from all directions//See do I really wanna grab for sloppy seconds from ya asshole man who's showin no signs a steppin WTF was I expectin?!//Ignorin others at the tiny chance we could be lovers in denial all the while you were torn for another thus I suffered; silently though all inside of me had ruptured//You loved me once and made it blatant but I hesitated when the feelings situated//Lord knows we mighta made it when you were vacant if I hadn’t waited now it’s wasted and I have to face it God I hate it!//Wrote this rhyme in that lonely time and saved it now I wish I’d seranaded before the year had faded and you & I had seperated in slow paces to distant places where our faces refused to recognize at how our eyes displayed it//Never such a strangeness as a love so nameless I had to fake it due to situations gettin complicated//It became a struggle when I’d hug you every muscle screamed “I love you” just a couple a thousand times if just our minds could intertwine and hear how mine had spoken of you//In a slightly troubled mumble vaugely subtle with an abysmal puddle full of tears at how it all ended with a shovel...LOST!...unable to rebuttle only slowly crumble as it tumbled down-hill and cut on every rock n jagged rubble//Left me puzzled; had it lasted it’d become that of a bubble floatin over needles up and down like every curve upon my knuckles//Thus I’ve nothin left to do but stumble as my heart is ripped apart and pummeled//The worst kinda secret when your unable to conceal it couldn’t keep it only a matter of time before a friend a mine revealed it to her face she was confused and I could feel it//Immediate weirdness came and veered it’s ugly head that you could see in our appearance things have changed it’s not the same and I had feared this since the beginning and now the ending is at it’s nearest//First came the avoidance where our voices became nothing more than noises and ya didn’t seem to notice when my being was at it’s brokest was it confusion or annoyance?//Of all things mere moments would’ve aquainted me to know this but, no-it’s more like cat n mouse with rat traps and poisons//Left with only wonderin why the letters stopped comin in and now your running away the light a day has come to thunderin//I’m coverin my face with smiles to hide whats under them but inside I’ve all but died in slumberin//It’s come to this I called your number and the words “It’s Cris” had never left my tounge again//Because....I called and finally got an answer but there was no banter only soft chatter of you tellin ya sis she shouldn’t have answered and you were madd at her//As if it couldn’t have gotten sadder all I heard next was a click and nothing more of you there after(Thus concludes the final chapter)//No grudges I’ve gotten better and saved every letter we’d written together forever in my subconcious to be honest I’ll never forget her//I was honored to have had you that long though I wish it had been longer I’ve grown stronger since then but way back when I was never fonder...... So why’d ya have to go and be my best friend? If you wasn’t we mighta been on the phone this minute but if you wasn’t these feelins mighta never existed ya voice whispas in my mind from time to time and I’m goin miss it... Why’d ya have to go and be my best friend? I loved you...... I've nothing left to do but wonder......why?...I wonder.... Hope you felt it. I'm really proud of this piece and I really put a lot of thought into it. By all means please be brutally honest. If you don't like it please tell me why and give me an explanation. The format is really weird to read I'm not very good at that sort of thing that was the more traditionally structure for writing rap lyrics when I first started posting them on the internet. I hope it wasn't too much of a burden. Thank you very much for reading though. If you like this one I will post more when I can. Asta!! (31 views and 1 reply....If they liked it...they'd reply...they don't like it ) __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!! Last edited by K-Wise; 09-16-2003 at 12:07 AM..

09-13-2003, 05:35 AM	#2 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	Yea, I like it. I could almost here it being done while I was reading it. It's pretty cool. Thanks for postingit, please post some more. __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

09-22-2003, 09:30 PM	#4 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	Really? Thanx man I really appreciate that. Asta!! __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!!

10-24-2004, 07:17 PM	#5 (permalink)
amonkie Drifting Administrator Location: Windy City	Though this was originally posted before my time, I really like it! The fact you wrote it for rap makes it all the more powerful.... You're angry and frustrated - the words aren't meant to come across relaxing and soothing. The mental pictures you created were really original - especially the bubbles on needles across your knuckles. I could really see those things happening. Can't wait to see more! __________________ Calling from deep in the heart, from where the eyes can't see and the ears can't hear, from where the mountain trails end and only love can go... ~~~ Three Rivers Hare Krishna

10-24-2004, 07:45 PM	#6 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	Oh wow that was fast. Thank you very much. I liked that line too. For a traditional style of rap people thought it was a bit much and they thought it winded on for too long. Probably true but I still like it and I said just about everything I needed to say. I have other raps. I've never thought about posting them though. Maybe I will just so I can have more posts in this forum. I still wanna try writing more poetry though. I feel that in one way or another my raps really are poetry but most people don't feel that way and because of it won't read them in such a way. They'll read actual poetry thats called poetry though. I'm happy to do both if I have to. Thanx again for reading. Tommorow I'm gonna start reading all these posts that have 0 replies and see if I can reply to them. And check the second page for them too. I imagine it has to feel a little empty to post something and have no one feel the need to say anything about it. I can't imagine how far down this old one was. Asta!! __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!!

09-22-2003, 06:07 PM	#3 (permalink)
Journeyman Like John Goodman, but not. Location: SFBA, California	I dunno if it was supposed to be internally voiced out as a sort of solo rap artist but that's the way it went in my head, and it was great. Biggest poem I ever read without having to break.

10-27-2004, 11:55 AM	#7 (permalink)
heather99 Upright Location: Burton-on-Trent, England	Hi, you are right I posted a couple with zero replies. Good luck to you. Well done

10-27-2004, 12:59 PM	#8 (permalink)
irseg Junkie Location: Florida	Does anybody here speak jive?

11-01-2004, 11:15 PM	#10 (permalink)
Seer666 Oh dear God he breeded Location: Arizona	First off, let me just say, I really don't care for rap as a whole. That said, let me also say if more people did it that way I would be it's biggest fan. Fucking brillint! Keep posting, I REALLY am looking forward to more of your work. __________________ Bad spellers of the world untie!!! I am the one you warned me of I seem to have misplaced the bullet with your name on it, but I have a whole box addressed to occupant.

11-02-2004, 05:02 AM	#11 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	Thanx man ya dunno what that means to me. I must add though that I'm inspired by emcees who are equally as good and better than me and touch on similar subject matters so if you're willing to try them out, there are emcees out there you will love. I'll dig up some more lyrics to post later on today. While you're waiting you can read Water Color Woman just a little ways down the page...not a rap but a fairly good poem by my standards. Asta!! __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!!

12-22-2004, 09:51 PM	#12 (permalink)
mokle Psycho Location: Alberta, Canada	Hey man, Another good song you got there. You've got a great talent for writing poetry. As a rap song, you most recent lyrics flowed better in my head, but nobody can flow lyrics like their creator Have you ever laid down some of these lyrics on a simple drum beat? Perhaps you should record some of these songs, even if just on your computer. Look forward to your next song. __________________ Mokle "Your hands can't hit what your eyes can't see" -Ali

12-23-2004, 04:39 AM	#13 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	Actually no..not these songs. I don't have a computer I can record on anymore. I used to have some old little rhymes here and there recorded in RM and WMV format but I lost the page they were uploaded on as well as the computer I had originally made them on...it broke. I'd just get beats off of MP3.com...back then there were a lot of guys making great beats and letting people use them for free...not so much anymore though...least not on MP3.com last time I checked. This is a Mac and it's not mine so I can't record on it. If I ever get another PC I'll probably get Cool Edit or some other recording programs and throw tracks down and get a Soundclick.com page but until then they're just lyrics. Me and my friend both have strong aspirations to record music we just don't have the tools at our disposal. He's been saving up to buy things little by little...he said we should have everything we need within the next two years haha. Last I checked he had 200 bucks saved up for speakers. Be nice if we knew of a studio and a producer but most people just have to do it on their own these days...which takes lots of time and patience...and keeping your skills sharp during that time. You're right the other does kind of flow better but I can also manage to flow those lyrics pretty well as well. Most can't see how but my style is very weird and because of my influences and practice I've almost perfected how to read my rhymes...I just have to find the right beat and I can spit that one word for word. Not sure if I have any other pieces I'd deem worthy enough to post here but I can check...or write another one...or add more to a previous one heh. Sorry I don't have more lyrics for you to read right now..I promise I'll look until then I guess you could read Water Color Woman but it's ventured off to page 2 already hmm I'll dig it up for you....Okay here it is Water Color Woman Glad you enjoyed my lyrics hope you enjoy my poetry as well. Asta!! __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!!