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silvertiger · 07-29-2005, 08:00 PM

Greetings all,

I have spens a healthy clip of my free time reading books and thought to myself "why not.. i can do that".

I like the way i write.. and want to see if others do too. Input would be awesome.. Feedback would be better.

this is a 1st draft of my Prologue .. lemme know what you think.

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Prologue

A heavy mist formed as he exhaled into the cold night air. His lungs were burning from the sheer effort of keeping the steady pace that had driven through the eastern half of the <name> forest. Steadfastly aware that his heavy breathing could very well bring attention to him he began to recite an old meditation he had learned in his youth that best ease him at times like this.

“I shall still my inner being, so that I may calm the storms within me. I shall quiet my furrowed mind that I may listen to all that may guide me. I shall quell all fear that I may gain courage. From all these things shall I gain solace and overcome any challenge”

It had been a while since his last mental recital, yet it had the expected calming effect, as his breath was now slow and controlled. He could still feel his heart beating in his chest which was a faint reminder of his current situation that brought him back to the present.
He could smell the growing moss that covered the ancient trees around him. As he heard the snap of a branch in the distance he whirled into action his body twisting like a reed in the wind as he skirted to the left just in time for a steel tipped arrow to imbed itself into the base of the tree exactly where his head had been.
It had come just as he had anticipated it. One <fellow trainee name> was upon him immediately and he could hear the movements of two more following while the fourth whisked in from the forest canopy where the arrow had been loosed. With his mental acuity he was able to see the entire scene play out as if it had been rehearsed. The first attacker came in with a quick swing from his dagger that <hero> easily sidestepped. As he glided to the left he positioned himself to parry the oncoming sword that the second was bringing to bear on him. He quickly brushed aside the sword with ample time to arc a counter thrust with his staff that connected just above the shoulder causing the sword to drop softly to the ground. With a small movement he used the butt of the staff to render the sword bearer unconscious with a blow to the temple.
Having only a split second to read and anticipate the third attacker’s intentions he rolled over the falling unconscious attacker and swung with all his might to bear directly on the man behind. Not having been prepared for the speed and agility of <hero> the attacker only had time to wince before falling to the ground in a crumpled heap.
Now there was the challenge of facing two foes that had seen him dispatch their counterparts with impunity. The first attacker lunged over his fallen comrades to attempt to draw <hero> into an off balance defensive stance. This seemed to work until <hero> caught the attackers leading sword edge with a tassle from his staff and drew the attacker forward into his approaching knee, rendering his third victim into silent sleep.
The fourth assailant, knowing very well that he would be no match at melee altered his course to veer away from the battle. The staff in <hero>’s hands lifted slowly as he concentrated on the spell that would end this conflict. A brilliant blue glow grew around the head of the staff as small glimmers of light shone from the <fancy name> crystal that had been mounted there. <hero> need not open his eyes to locate his prey, as this would be assassin made no secret of his plight and as such created an easily trail of sounds that could be used to isolate him. <hero> let loose the magical burst, and in an instant heard the echoed screams of his quarry as the man fell silent to the forest floor.
With the speed of nothing he had ever seen <hero> saw a flash of what he knew must be an immensely powerful spell and in an instant he was encased in a sphere of solid air and then the world faded from his vision as he lost consciousness.

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I've also begun chapter one.. and hope to continue.. but time isn't always kind to a full time worker and father of 4...

either way.. love to hear from ya.

07-29-2005, 08:00 PM	#1 (permalink)
silvertiger Tilted Location: Denver	A Novel I'm working on Greetings all, I have spens a healthy clip of my free time reading books and thought to myself "why not.. i can do that". I like the way i write.. and want to see if others do too. Input would be awesome.. Feedback would be better. this is a 1st draft of my Prologue .. lemme know what you think. ------------------------------------------------------- Prologue A heavy mist formed as he exhaled into the cold night air. His lungs were burning from the sheer effort of keeping the steady pace that had driven through the eastern half of the <name> forest. Steadfastly aware that his heavy breathing could very well bring attention to him he began to recite an old meditation he had learned in his youth that best ease him at times like this. “I shall still my inner being, so that I may calm the storms within me. I shall quiet my furrowed mind that I may listen to all that may guide me. I shall quell all fear that I may gain courage. From all these things shall I gain solace and overcome any challenge” It had been a while since his last mental recital, yet it had the expected calming effect, as his breath was now slow and controlled. He could still feel his heart beating in his chest which was a faint reminder of his current situation that brought him back to the present. He could smell the growing moss that covered the ancient trees around him. As he heard the snap of a branch in the distance he whirled into action his body twisting like a reed in the wind as he skirted to the left just in time for a steel tipped arrow to imbed itself into the base of the tree exactly where his head had been. It had come just as he had anticipated it. One <fellow trainee name> was upon him immediately and he could hear the movements of two more following while the fourth whisked in from the forest canopy where the arrow had been loosed. With his mental acuity he was able to see the entire scene play out as if it had been rehearsed. The first attacker came in with a quick swing from his dagger that <hero> easily sidestepped. As he glided to the left he positioned himself to parry the oncoming sword that the second was bringing to bear on him. He quickly brushed aside the sword with ample time to arc a counter thrust with his staff that connected just above the shoulder causing the sword to drop softly to the ground. With a small movement he used the butt of the staff to render the sword bearer unconscious with a blow to the temple. Having only a split second to read and anticipate the third attacker’s intentions he rolled over the falling unconscious attacker and swung with all his might to bear directly on the man behind. Not having been prepared for the speed and agility of <hero> the attacker only had time to wince before falling to the ground in a crumpled heap. Now there was the challenge of facing two foes that had seen him dispatch their counterparts with impunity. The first attacker lunged over his fallen comrades to attempt to draw <hero> into an off balance defensive stance. This seemed to work until <hero> caught the attackers leading sword edge with a tassle from his staff and drew the attacker forward into his approaching knee, rendering his third victim into silent sleep. The fourth assailant, knowing very well that he would be no match at melee altered his course to veer away from the battle. The staff in <hero>’s hands lifted slowly as he concentrated on the spell that would end this conflict. A brilliant blue glow grew around the head of the staff as small glimmers of light shone from the <fancy name> crystal that had been mounted there. <hero> need not open his eyes to locate his prey, as this would be assassin made no secret of his plight and as such created an easily trail of sounds that could be used to isolate him. <hero> let loose the magical burst, and in an instant heard the echoed screams of his quarry as the man fell silent to the forest floor. With the speed of nothing he had ever seen <hero> saw a flash of what he knew must be an immensely powerful spell and in an instant he was encased in a sphere of solid air and then the world faded from his vision as he lost consciousness. -------------------------------------------------------------- I've also begun chapter one.. and hope to continue.. but time isn't always kind to a full time worker and father of 4... either way.. love to hear from ya.