Very nice Augi! I hope Cybertooth is expanded upon. I felt the last sentence was more of a cliffhanger than anything else. Why is Jake sitting in the fed building? What happened in those three months between the discovery of Cybertooth's "sentience" and Jake in the federal building? What kind of character development occured in the one year and four months that makes us want to care about the main characters?
Sam Hain is very good as well. I love the imagery. And I like the play on words with his name.
Only crit I'd have is that I think some of the diction is incorrect. For instance, in the sentence, "Its cases where crude," I believe you meant, "Its cases were crude,". (I hate punctuation concerning quotations marks, btw). But other than that, it's very good writing.
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