My own Hip Hop Lyrics
 

Ok...I am making this thread for Hip Hop fans that have a love for the music...I just recently started to scribble down my own lyrics...I am asking for honest opinions from hip hop fans and anybody else...If you don't like it say so in a nice way or make a suggestion on what would fit better. All compliments & Suggestions are welcome

Thanks go out to K-Wise for helping me out on changing little things to give it a nicer flow...Not all of the lyrics have been edited or moved around...these are just...Rough copy's I guess you could call them....Straight from my mind to the pages of TFP.

Now these are not full Track lyrics...More like Battle ryhmes...I am gonna post what I have got so far..but I don't know if I consider these complete or not.

K-Wise...Feel free to post your own shit here too and any other MC's that are writing ryhmes...I do not consider myself an actual MC...But the past few hours I have been writing alot of shit down and find myself getting addicted to it.

So Remember..Don't bring the hate if you can't relate.

Ok here's the first one

Next one

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Last one for now

that's currently what I have...I am just sharing this to get other Hip Hop Heads Opinions on it...If you think it's not that great, Then fine...But say it in a nice way.

Thanks...There will be more to come soon.

I would really like if other people shared there hip hop lryics here also.

Battle rhymes are better if they're 100% improv. They're better that way because they can be taylored to be an attack at they guy you're facing.

Not saying it's easy, but stick at it. Snoop honed his skills at his high school where his friend would point to something, anything, and Snoop would rap about it.

If ya got the 8 Mile DVD, there's a section where there are four people who are battling him in scenes that are kinda for fun, might be in the movie. Eminem is supposed to just mime everything because his voice was gone and he couldn't talk well. The first guy went as planned, the second time though, the crowd started booing Em, he said screw it, turned his mic on, and destroyed everyone he faced 100% improv.

But like I said man, keep at it, the only way you improve is by doing it.

Thanks man..My intentions are not for these to be battle raps, But they just have the same sound as battle raps...Doing it freestyle is extremly hard..Or atleast i think it is...Actually I guess these are battle raps in a way...I just like the sound of battle raps...I am gonna try some new styles and see how it goes later on, But I am having fun with this style right now.

Whatever comes into my head I will scribble it down then just touch it up.

thanks for reading it..and giving advice.

Battle rhymes don't necessarily have to be improv to be better but it is more impressive to be able to freestyle off the top. But battle rhymes don't necessarily have to be directed at any one person imparticular. Like Canibus or Chino XL for example. Me I used to be all about em but battle lyrics tire after a while and I look to write something with depth. Heres an example of what I'm talkin bout

Those are some of my own. Kinda on some Def Poetry type shit. I wanted to write and I wanted it to be deep and thats what came out. Not finished yet still needs another verse. That ones leanin to more towards the bit of abstract style of hip-hop ya see in cats like Sage Francis and Aesop Rock. Although not nearly as abstract as them.

Well now about IC3's rhymes...well ya know what I think of them already. I'm a pretty nifty freestyler myself and I'll tell ya this....It can't be taught but basically after you've been writing a while freestyling comes very easy. Not because you're spitting writtens but because after writing for years you already know what words rhyme without even having to think about it it just comes instinctively. It comes with practice and you'll never get good at it unless ya try it. Cause you can't always spit writtens cause unless you have one of those gifted type of natural flows, not every rhyme you write will be on beat with just any instrumental.

Asta!!

That is pretty deep K-Wise..I'm feeling that...I am not sure if I could just write an actual track without thier being hints of battle raps though...Not that I don't like that type of sound...It's just harder to write something like you just posted.

Anyways, I like that..I wanna hear some of your other styles also when you have a chance to post them.

Thanks.

Yeah I agree it really is harder. I've been workin on that one for a while now changing around every little thing sometimes erasing whole bars and starting them all over. Now the battle stuff yeah I've written a lot of it and I became pretty prestigious for it. Heres a battle verse I wrote a while back in a Crew battle against a guy named Ignorant Prodigy, who's crew was Arrestin Peace. Proof that a rhyme ain't gotta be freestyled to be good.

Just ta give you an example of my different types of writting. Thats just copied and pasted from the site I posted it at a while back in its entirety exactly as it was in the post. Hope ya like it.

Asta!!

I just finished this one..

Holy shit K-wise, That's some serious ryhmes...That's some crazy ass ryhmes...How can you go on for so long, i can only write little skit type ryhmes...I am gonna try making something longer next time and see what i come up with.

That is some serious shit though

I like that alot.

Thanx. I'm glad you like them. Yer last two rhymes are gettin better.

Asta!!

Thanks..I keep reading the last set of ryhmes you posted...That's so awsome.

Ok this is an updated version of the last post i made of this verse...I edited a couple things when I was expanding the verse.

Just to let the mods know and you K-Wise, I am not taking shots at anybody, I'm just rymin what i'm thinking.

Just want to make that clear, Thanks.

Not bad buddy not bad yer gettin the hang of it. Pretty soon yo...I just know.

Asta!!

This one I just finished...believe it or not..It took me about 2 or 3 hours to do this one...I almost gave up on it.

I may go back and add to it later on, But this is what I got for now.

EDIT: I updated this verse..Did not Edit anything.

That last one was ok, but at some parts it just fell apart. Like: That part just kinda killed the flow IMO. The beginning is pretty good though, it had a real good flow going, which is hard to do.

What do you mean by it lost the flow at that part? I am asking cause I am not sure if I like it either, I am basically saying that, that person is a run away train not knowing where he's going...And I am on a track where I know exactly where I'm going....

I am more concerned with this part of the verse here

There was nothing after that, That really went good with it...Any suggestions?

When I read it I had a good beat in the background. Everything else just flowed, but when you hit that line, it just gets choppy for a little bit. The run away train with no conductor is good, but it starts getting choppy at destination unknown. The words just don't flow like the rest. Then again, that was with a slower Timbaland beat. Read to a faster beat in more of an Eminem fashion it gets by better, but rapping like Eminem is hangs up on the "I ask the crowd to become silent line" You could probably just scrap that line altogether.

Thanks man..Much appreciated, I haven't tried rappin this over a beat yet..And Every verse that I have posted in this thread...I always try to rap it in an Eminem type flow like you mentioned...I am not sure why, but it just seems to go better that way..I guess you feel the same way also.

And I was also thinking about scrapping that line that you mentioned...But since you and K-Wise are the only two leaving comments..I will just go with what you guys think is best, I'm sure K-Wise will say the same thing about that one line being scrapped.

Thanks Again...Do you happen to write any ryhmes yourself? If so, post them here...If you want that is.

Thanks again for the feedback.

Havin a beat always helps, gets ya in the flow, ya feel it and ya know almost right away if it's good or not and what needs fixing.

And nah, I don't write any rhymes, I ain't any good at writing. I'm dabbling a little in beats though, I'll probably get a few real music programs when I get a new computer (a few months off) and actually put together something that doesn't suck :)

Are you using a computer program for your beats? Or some kind of beat machine?

My friend is suppose to hook me up with Reason with the sound Bank...There's so much shit you can do with that program, Make All kinds of beats...