Halx

My oldest sister Mikie has a lot of dreams. She's sorta like me as I was a few months ago - stuck in a rut with too many obligations tying her in one place. She wants really badly to become a graphic designer. This year for Christmas, I sorta broke my budget a little for her... 'cause I wanna see her succeed. I got her a graphics tablet for her computer... something she can use to get to the next level of graphic design, and probably the last thing she'd ever expect.

I figured I'd write a little poem to her for her to read before she opens it up, but I couldn't think of anything besides rhyming couplets. I really detest rhyming couplets. Anyways, I wrote it ... and here it is.

Bear with me now
I'm used to free verse
because poems in couplets
always sound terse
My dear sister Mikie
I hope you approve
Because writing these rhymes
Is cramping my groove
I got you a present
that I know you'll enjoy
You could not predict it
it's yours to employ
It's perfect for you
and you'll see what's implied
when you tear off the wrapping
and stare starry-eyed
To art and to freedom
To future without doubt
C'mon, rip off the paper
and freak the hell out...

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J.R.V.A.

I like it. I'm sure it, as well as the present, will bring a smile to her face.

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And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart

K-Wise

^ Ditto. It's got humor. I think she'll like it...and when she opens the gift she'll like it even more.

Asta!!

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It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys! - Asta!!

Mephisto2

Looks good.

Replace the word "without" with "not" and it flows better.


Nice touch Hal.


Mr Mephisto