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She left me for some other guy, she played me like a puppet, I had given her the strings, it was my fault, and now, when the play is over, and the crowd is laughing, I am left to rot among the other trash. I feel like a love puppet.



Love Puppet

Dub me a toy that a player plays
Dub me a loser that’s never been loved,
All the stings I lined in array,
For the puppeteer on the stage above,
Feel good now that you’ve the crowds acclaim,
Of the play of the puppet you loved so claim.

amonkie

I really like how your anger is very subtle - you put the lines in array and the acclaim together - and it sends the picture, to me at least, of how she did whatever she could for approval of others. I'm glad this made me think a little harder about it. Thanks!

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Calling from deep in the heart, from where the eyes can't see and the ears can't hear, from where the mountain trails end and only love can go... ~~~ Three Rivers Hare Krishna

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thanks for appreciating, it helps the wound a bit.

sandinista

definitely a good piece. I'm a pretty tough critic of poetry too, I never really like it. I love the mental image you project, it's good. Thanks for that.

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thank you

vonstalhein

I love puppets. Your poem reminds me of a King Crimson song! Anyway, it's very like and i good it.

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huh? Hahaha I take that as a compliment. thanks

J.R.V.A.

Nice... funny how some words flow when there is pain behind them

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And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart

vonstalhein

It was a compliment. King Crimson Rock. The song was about a medieaval court i think...and the twist was everyone in it was puppets controlled by the jester....typical!

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mmmm, I didn't .. pass by that song.

I couldn't agree more J.R.V.A, .. words only come by when the heart is torn