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tecoyah · 11-07-2004, 07:07 AM

Breath this paid for line
Make me see your imagined path
As this road is drawn by writers quill
Fabricated belief is propogandas’ birth
Oh, how you feel my countrys’ ache
A crowd at a time
Tell us plans of future times
Knowing full well, what is the chance
Proclaim your love and show ill will
For such fortitude as needed for my earth
Is beyond your reach to take
And this indeed, is crime

Fail me, as you will
I am but one, amongst this mass
But in the end all will fail
If yours is set to pass

K-Wise · 11-25-2004, 03:28 AM

I especially like the last stanza. This kind of reminds me of a rock song. Dunno what you were going for but thats what came to mind. Good work man.

Asta!!

11-07-2004, 07:07 AM	#1 (permalink)
tecoyah Illusionary	Breath this Paid for Line Breath this paid for line Make me see your imagined path As this road is drawn by writers quill Fabricated belief is propogandas’ birth Oh, how you feel my countrys’ ache A crowd at a time Tell us plans of future times Knowing full well, what is the chance Proclaim your love and show ill will For such fortitude as needed for my earth Is beyond your reach to take And this indeed, is crime Fail me, as you will I am but one, amongst this mass But in the end all will fail If yours is set to pass __________________ Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha

11-25-2004, 03:28 AM	#2 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	I especially like the last stanza. This kind of reminds me of a rock song. Dunno what you were going for but thats what came to mind. Good work man. Asta!! __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!!