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seretogis 05-18-2003 07:52 PM

horrible beautiful secret
 
new and improved, more teen angst than ever before!

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horrible beautiful secret

The smile on your face
draws me like a moth to a flame
And I wonder, if you knew,
things would still be the same

I only wish I could tell
how I feel about you
In my dreams I feel
that you already knew

This secret of mine

Alas, my romantic wishing,
my hopes, my dreams, my fears
When the truth is known to you,
I pray to see you through my tears

I love you in a way
that no one could explain
And thoughts of your rejection
cause me such pain

This horrible secret of mine

Better not to tell you
and merely admire from afar
Or shall I take the chance
and wish upon your star

To lose you would be worse
Than the sieze of my soul
Losing you would destroy me
So my heart must pay the toll

This beautiful secret of mine

Remove from me these chains
Of pity, doubt, and fear
Show to me somehow
A path which is clear

Until I can trust myself
Enough to tell you how I feel
I must hide this secret
'Til I'm served my last meal

This horrible beautiful secret of mine

My soul and pen become one
As I think of us two
In hopes you will read this
and know I write of you

When you do understand
And rip my heart from my chest
Please realize, these tears of blood
Were only for the best

krazykemist 05-19-2003 04:11 AM

Great imagery and the message is clear.
Nice work.

Angel 05-19-2003 04:52 PM

I really like the texture and feel of this. Very moving.
Such conflict residing deep within.
A pleasure to read.
Thank you for sharing.

Eowyn_Vala 05-26-2003 12:02 PM

this is one of the most beautiful pieces i have ever read. your writing is very moving and i am at a loss for what to say.

urgodhere 05-26-2003 09:19 PM

Very very good. I love the message and the tone/imagery is excellent for the message. Very pleasurable to read. Plz post more of ur outstanding work.

SaltPork 06-04-2003 07:14 PM

Stunning in it's visuals and very moving. Thank you for sharing this, I'm sure many can relate.

bobdobbs8056135 06-14-2003 05:14 PM

tone of a certain age adequately summed

a_divine_martyr 06-14-2003 11:30 PM

Great piece of writing. :)

seretogis 06-28-2003 01:33 AM

If you likey, you can see my other poetry at:
http://www.tfproject.org/tfp/showthr...&postid=327619

Or, you can view it on my website along with other writings, by clicking the "www" button below.

J.R.V.A. 06-30-2003 03:43 PM

Cool, good stuff. Thanks for sharing

fallen_angel 07-20-2003 02:34 PM

great work. . . the imagery is amazing and the emotions that you put out into the open are wonderful. . . thank you


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