crumbbum

Here goes-

How can it be
that so many are just waiting to die
Pallid hands creeping up the
virgin's skirt
that awful grin
would it be so bad to walk alone?
wandering through the ruins of my crumbled home
I was never one to be satisfied
with letting things fade
and I won't let you go/drop your hand/watch you fall
far below

They won't do it to both of us
And now the bombs are falling
and my knees are cut
but I will last
until the end, to get through this
we are all waiting for the dawn, child
if only I could feel your breath
lose this dread
begin again
undo these nightmares, screaming dreamscapes burning in my memory
I plead with G-d to release me
and I will wrap you in blankets
and wipe you clean
and touch the tear from your cheek to my lips
it will never leave me


Kind of long complicated relationship- she had been preyed on by a sexual predator a year before(over a long period, guy was in position of authority, totally messed with her head, she thought that it had been her doing). She didn't "get" what had happened, I "woke her up" and she was in the process of reclaiming herself. In the process she rejected me, which was very painful. It's kind of abstract, a lot of different feelings went into it. I basically took a lot of pain, staying with her(though I stopped doing sexual things with her) until she was seeing a therapist and I knew she was in a good place.

Angel

This was absolutely breath taking!
An emotional and deep piece of work.
It brought tears of understanding to me.
Thank you for sharing.

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In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus

crumbbum

Thank you Angel. Your poems are lovely by the way

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rogue49

It's nice to know another giving soul,
you did good man.

Good words too.
Keep doing the same.

J.R.V.A.

I like this. Have you thought of putting the description after the poem? Sometimes I like to read poetry to get my own feeling for it. It is very vivid,Thanks

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crumbbum

Thanks for the suggestion

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Eowyn_Vala

i am left speechless from reading this. it is beautiful and sad and makes a part of me cry out in understanding.

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urgodhere

Very emotional and extremely deep. It took a big man to give up soo much for a women. U must truly care for her and i hope she remembers this.

bobdobbs8056135

a fine emotional work

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rat

empathy is all that i can give, for i've been there too. sorry to hear things ended the way they did, but maintain hope that all is for the best.

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mya

I think that it says allot about your character to want to help her through something like that. I'm sorry she rejected your attempts. Sometimes I think it's hard to move on in her situation and pushing you away might have been the only way she knew how. I think you're an awesome guy for trying to understand. And you write beautiful.

amonkie

Sometimes in order to truly help others, we have to put ourselves in harms way - your written perspective shows just how much you care for her, and also just how deeply she hurt you. Have strength in knowing she's better thanks in part to you.

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