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fallenangel 07-13-2004 02:28 PM

my first crack at this
 
Ok, here goes... this is my first time posting up in Literature, so be patient... Funny how i find it easier to post in exhibition than here. Be nice. I've been writing to myself for so long, but stopped because of a lot of reasons. Here's my jump back into the written word.

Like the words I've been unable to speak
Like the secret promises we swore to always keep.
I'm bound and gagged by my own passion,
Tied up by my heartstrings in tragic fashion.
To escape would mean to cut those ties,
To face head on the unspoken lies.
I long to close the book of us,
Place it on the shelf of forgotten trust.
Every time i'm with you, i plead it'll be the last
So i can move on and forget the pain of most recent past
Do you feel the same way?
Do you dream and fear me every day.
Within me lies the sick disease of heartache,
Poisoned and dying but it just won't break.
I long to feel passion and life again,
But it can't be from you if we're meant to be friends.
Hate me, love me, hurt me, leave me.
Make up your mind because i can't take the deceiving.
I will hold my head up high,
And the mournful tears will soon run dry.
I'm no longer a dreamer, as only the strong survive,
But the part of me you touched is no longer alive.
My ears are deaf to your whispers in the night.
My bed is cold now and it's taking all my might
To walk away
Look to a new day
Forget your kisses
Love, we need some distance.
Although they're rusty, i'm regaining my wings
Because sometimes even fallen angels relearn how to sing.


-Fallenangel

pan6467 07-13-2004 02:42 PM

very good, very touching. Hope to read more.

tecoyah 07-13-2004 04:57 PM

Re: my first crack at this
 
Quote:

Originally posted by fallenangel

To face head on the unspoken lies.
I long to close the book of us,
Place it on the shelf of forgotten trust.



-Fallenangel

Beautiful, These lines are a rare gift....thank you.

So glad you decided to share with us....please continue to do so.

amonkie 07-13-2004 08:35 PM

Thanks for your faith in this community and sharing with us! I sincerely look forward to reading more of your work.

Dawson70 07-14-2004 09:04 AM

I find it amazingly sincere. Your heart must be filled with such turmoil and confusion. The words pour out your true emotions. Try to hang onto that passion. I feel sorry for the person willing to seperate from such a passionate and intellegent soul. Great poem!

ForgottenKnight 07-26-2004 07:35 PM

Wonderful! Thanks for sharing it with us! I hope that you continue to keep writting!

vonstalhein 07-29-2004 06:49 AM

Not a bloody bad first crack if you ask me! Keep cracking!

WarriorBuddha 07-29-2004 07:13 AM

Fantastic words of emotion. I really enjoyed that one and hope to see more soon.

xeem 07-29-2004 09:01 AM

Wohoo, mesmerising. Love it love it love it :) Very nice poetry.~


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