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tecoyah · 06-02-2004, 04:50 PM

Mist kicked up by gusts
Far off places leave their scent on beaded drops
This ocean is mine
Each cracked angle of foam that never stops
Licking rocks to sand
Ever making patterns on my beached mind
Floating natures toys
Buried in your breath for me to find

emmdubbs · 06-02-2004, 05:46 PM

"Ever making patterns on my beached mind"

brilliant allusion...wonderfull line...fits so perfect with the "water" theme....bravo

ForgottenKnight · 06-07-2004, 11:04 PM

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Originally posted by teknotoeknee
"Ever making patterns on my beached mind"

brilliant allusion...wonderfull line...fits so perfect with the "water" theme....bravo

Agreed! That was my favorite line as well! I also like how you described the decay of rocks to sand as the water "licking" it. Good one! Thanks for sharing!

tecoyah · 06-08-2004, 02:57 AM

Many thanks.....the last two lines describe finding driftwood in the floatsam, ahh memories.

vonstalhein · 06-17-2004, 11:35 AM

I second the above sentiments. i liked the feeling i got from 'this ocean is mine' a lot. It conjurs for me the idea of feeling very close to the sea, to nature, and it's pretty.

J.R.V.A. · 06-17-2004, 01:53 PM

Tis is my favorite line.. Thanks

Buried in your breath for me to find

06-02-2004, 04:50 PM	#1 (permalink)
tecoyah Illusionary	Pacific Mist kicked up by gusts Far off places leave their scent on beaded drops This ocean is mine Each cracked angle of foam that never stops Licking rocks to sand Ever making patterns on my beached mind Floating natures toys Buried in your breath for me to find __________________ Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha

06-02-2004, 05:46 PM	#2 (permalink)
emmdubbs Psycho Location: the western part of new york	"Ever making patterns on my beached mind" brilliant allusion...wonderfull line...fits so perfect with the "water" theme....bravo __________________ "You're not your job. You're not how much money you have in the bank. You're not the car you drive. You're not the contents of your wallet. You're not your fucking khakis. You're the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world." - Tyler Durden

06-08-2004, 02:57 AM	#4 (permalink)
tecoyah Illusionary	Many thanks.....the last two lines describe finding driftwood in the floatsam, ahh memories. __________________ Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha

06-17-2004, 11:35 AM	#5 (permalink)
vonstalhein Insane Location: Where You Live.	I second the above sentiments. i liked the feeling i got from 'this ocean is mine' a lot. It conjurs for me the idea of feeling very close to the sea, to nature, and it's pretty. __________________ No Win No Fee

06-17-2004, 01:53 PM	#6 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	Tis is my favorite line.. Thanks Buried in your breath for me to find __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart