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analog · 04-18-2004, 09:44 PM

My universe gone
I collapse inside my pain
My heart grows weaker

gave my love away
my thoughts were always of her
i weep for my loss

I stop every day
and mourn my stupidity
God, please forgive me

He gave me the love
and I was a fool with it
now I am empty.....

matteo101 · 04-19-2004, 01:34 PM

Nice haiku's. I really like the third one. So true in everyones sense.

eyeronic · 05-10-2004, 09:39 PM

Hang in there Ana, you will be writing happy haikus before you know it. Damn well done, btw.

tecoyah · 05-26-2004, 03:08 AM

Very well set, pointed and complete, excellent work

WarWagon · 05-26-2004, 10:51 AM

Damn dude, that was good.
It's simple, yet effective.
I'd love to see more.

SixEdxMia · 05-26-2004, 11:39 AM

I adore haiku,
Short sweet and right to the point,
Give us four more please?

04-18-2004, 09:44 PM	#1 (permalink)
analog Banned	analog haiku... My universe gone I collapse inside my pain My heart grows weaker gave my love away my thoughts were always of her i weep for my loss I stop every day and mourn my stupidity God, please forgive me He gave me the love and I was a fool with it now I am empty.....

05-10-2004, 09:39 PM	#3 (permalink)
eyeronic I run E. Location: New York	Hang in there Ana, you will be writing happy haikus before you know it. Damn well done, btw. __________________ I hold with those that favor fire.

05-26-2004, 03:08 AM	#4 (permalink)
tecoyah Illusionary	Very well set, pointed and complete, excellent work __________________ Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha

05-26-2004, 11:39 AM	#6 (permalink)
SixEdxMia <3 Peetster Location: Peetster's house.	I adore haiku, Short sweet and right to the point, Give us four more please? __________________ Honey,We're home.

04-19-2004, 01:34 PM	#2 (permalink)
matteo101 In transition Location: north, no south abit, over to the right, getting warmer...there!	Nice haiku's. I really like the third one. So true in everyones sense.

05-26-2004, 10:51 AM	#5 (permalink)
WarWagon Loser	Damn dude, that was good. It's simple, yet effective. I'd love to see more.