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a couple of really short poems
black as night
cold as stone gnarlled feet break the bone eternal sleep sweet as life sorrows deep burn like ice |
Nice, short and to the point
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A lot spoken in those eight short lines.
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nice, the form fits the sentiment. One suggestion, maybe change eternal to 'ternal, or change the whole line to something with 3 syllables since you were strict with the meter everywhere else.
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