02-20-2004, 12:35 AM | #1 (permalink) |
Please touch this.
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quick little jots
i'm trying to spur my mind, get it back in the emotional, poetic form.. so here are a few rigid attempts
the worry settles with every sip searching for the tragedy in my life waving my hand above it stirring whisps of the desperation making it dance for you swallowing quickly now pausing to feel my heavy thoughts drain out i've cheated myself out of this an exhibition of will would be if not for my stone face i'm bailing out the guilt with buckets of bitter drink as i drift the mellowing seas the sacrifice seems silly now as words fail when I need them most .... why did I have to be a writer when I could have written a thousand words with a brush stroke? The desperation and the lust I feel could be felt by others... by anyone. I could have invoked sadness, laughter, or even shock, but I had to be a wordsmith. Nobody reads poetry, though. Nobody cares to disect it. I could write fifteen different patterns into a piece and not get a response. Meanwhile, some yuppy just sold a canvas with a mauve dot in the bottom right corner, for forty-five bucks. I could have been brilliant, universal, adored. Instead, I'm pretentious. Oh, why did I have to be a writer? Because while art may move people, words direct them.
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02-20-2004, 07:47 AM | #2 (permalink) |
Junkie
Location: Utah
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Nice.... I really liked the first one, I could relate to it a lot. The second was pretty awesome also. Thanks for sharing your jots with us, and it's good to see you here again
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02-20-2004, 02:10 PM | #3 (permalink) |
Psycho
Location: NC
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I'm not much of a poet, but I think your verse is poignant with good flow.
As to your prose, that shit is pure poetry!!!
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