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Jadey · 11-06-2003, 10:30 PM

Shhhhh.
Did you hear that?

I thought I heard an original thought.
Nah, couldn’t have been.

Look away
As your HBO Comedy Special humor’s crumpled and thrown into the corner like a pair of hooker’s torn silk panties.
Don’t dare question the imponderables!
Examine or judge the jury of false hope.
Turn a deaf ear to the beckoning muses
And plagiarize the assassination of identity.
The Killing of Character.
Amputate all individuality
as your attributes are agonizingly annihilated
your uniqueness is assimilated into the mass produced gel of silly putty conformity.

Dance the dance of the shallow and misguided
And revel in your unique uniformity.
Sway with the masses like one of a thousand reeds in the marsh lands.
And step forward to declare:
“I think I heard something too.”
“Did you all hear that?”

But no one else heard it.
It was all in my head.

Esen · 11-07-2003, 04:26 PM

lol, that was pretty kick ass.

SSJwrestler · 11-07-2003, 07:05 PM

liking the simile with the silk panties, very original

Eldaire · 11-08-2003, 01:50 AM

Very sattirical. I liked it, but now the question remains, what are you going to do?

J.R.V.A. · 11-09-2003, 07:17 AM

Thanks Jadey, I'm glad to see your stuff here again. Pretty cool. I like this poem,it is really good.

tecoyah · 11-09-2003, 09:50 AM

Damn good...wish I'd thought of it
but pondering such , I wonder
If thought of such I had
wouldnt need to wander thru the muck
dependent on luck to progress
debating within myself on origionality
mundane as my days become

ForgottenKnight · 11-10-2003, 01:39 AM

That's really good! I like it! It was all in your head, but now it's on paper for the world to read. So now that people see and enjoy it, it's in others heads as well.

Jadey · 11-14-2003, 01:32 AM

Thanks all for the kind words.

carebear · 11-16-2003, 10:32 PM

After reading it, I almost felt I should be a nonconformist and tell you it sucks, but...
It's really good.
Truth is truth.
Thank you for sharing.

11-06-2003, 10:30 PM	#1 (permalink)
Jadey This Space For Rent Location: Davenport, Iowa	In my head Shhhhh. Did you hear that? I thought I heard an original thought. Nah, couldn’t have been. Look away As your HBO Comedy Special humor’s crumpled and thrown into the corner like a pair of hooker’s torn silk panties. Don’t dare question the imponderables! Examine or judge the jury of false hope. Turn a deaf ear to the beckoning muses And plagiarize the assassination of identity. The Killing of Character. Amputate all individuality as your attributes are agonizingly annihilated your uniqueness is assimilated into the mass produced gel of silly putty conformity. Dance the dance of the shallow and misguided And revel in your unique uniformity. Sway with the masses like one of a thousand reeds in the marsh lands. And step forward to declare: “I think I heard something too.” “Did you all hear that?” But no one else heard it. It was all in my head.

11-07-2003, 04:26 PM	#2 (permalink)
Esen TFPer formaly known as Chauncey Location: North East	lol, that was pretty kick ass. __________________ ~Esen What is everyone doing in my room?

11-09-2003, 07:17 AM	#5 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	Thanks Jadey, I'm glad to see your stuff here again. Pretty cool. I like this poem,it is really good. __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

11-09-2003, 09:50 AM	#6 (permalink)
tecoyah Illusionary	Damn good...wish I'd thought of it but pondering such , I wonder If thought of such I had wouldnt need to wander thru the muck dependent on luck to progress debating within myself on origionality mundane as my days become __________________ Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha

11-10-2003, 01:39 AM	#7 (permalink)
ForgottenKnight Jesus Freak Location: Following the light...	That's really good! I like it! It was all in your head, but now it's on paper for the world to read. So now that people see and enjoy it, it's in others heads as well. __________________ "People say I'm strange, does that make me a stranger?"

11-07-2003, 07:05 PM	#3 (permalink)
SSJwrestler Banned Location: Davidson, NC/ Manassas, VA	liking the simile with the silk panties, very original

11-08-2003, 01:50 AM	#4 (permalink)
Eldaire Loser Location: Davidson College, NC	Very sattirical. I liked it, but now the question remains, what are you going to do?

11-14-2003, 01:32 AM	#8 (permalink)
Jadey This Space For Rent Location: Davenport, Iowa	Thanks all for the kind words.

11-16-2003, 10:32 PM	#9 (permalink)
carebear Tilted Location: oklahoma	After reading it, I almost felt I should be a nonconformist and tell you it sucks, but... It's really good. Truth is truth. Thank you for sharing. __________________ go cubs!