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Eldaire · 10-28-2003, 12:44 PM

When I stood next to you,
my stomache used to turn
and my tongue used to roll
and my heart used to flutter.
There was always something I wanted to say.
I always had the words prepared.
But when I opened my mouth to tell you,
it always seemed that no words could do my feelings justice.
And so it went.

On that day, I was still trying to say it.
Then I looked at you,
and I saw your beautiful face
and your beautiful smile.
I realized suddenly that you were going to kiss me.
I remember each instance.
It was as though I was in a movie,
and each frame lasted an eternity.
My head was spinning,
I didn't know how this was possible.
I felt like I was floating.
I was overcome with happiness.
When your lips finally touched mine,
I melted away.
I can't even begin to describe the euphoria,
the incredible peace I felt.

And now you're gone again.
And my heart is lonely again.
I still feel your lips on mine,
and I long to hold you.
But you're drifting away from me.
Like a ghost of a happy past.
I can see you there,
but you're so far away.

Come back to me.

riptide4070 · 10-28-2003, 03:42 PM

beautiful but sad. It sucks when they go away but, "that's the way love goes."

nice work

J.R.V.A. · 10-28-2003, 03:53 PM

WOWWWW...... Very touching me....... Thanks

Esen · 10-28-2003, 04:44 PM

Very touching

Smoey · 10-30-2003, 08:41 AM

I remeber that feeling and so I long for that...

lolita · 10-31-2003, 06:43 PM

i think everyone feels that way at some stage...beautiful poem - good work!

ForgottenKnight · 10-31-2003, 10:20 PM

Beautiful work! I'm impressed! Keep it up!

Eowyn_Vala · 11-04-2003, 05:51 PM

I remember my first kiss. And the best part is that I'm still with him and every kiss is just like the first one only better. It was the angel in the broom closet that did it.

chavos · 11-04-2003, 07:03 PM

aw man...now i gotta go around missing my ex...

an excellent poem with great images-i was there all the way.

losthellhound · 11-04-2003, 08:04 PM

great stuff, really touched a part of my past that I usually dont go..

SSJwrestler · 11-06-2003, 08:51 PM

great job man

10-28-2003, 12:44 PM	#1 (permalink)
Eldaire Loser Location: Davidson College, NC	First Kiss When I stood next to you, my stomache used to turn and my tongue used to roll and my heart used to flutter. There was always something I wanted to say. I always had the words prepared. But when I opened my mouth to tell you, it always seemed that no words could do my feelings justice. And so it went. On that day, I was still trying to say it. Then I looked at you, and I saw your beautiful face and your beautiful smile. I realized suddenly that you were going to kiss me. I remember each instance. It was as though I was in a movie, and each frame lasted an eternity. My head was spinning, I didn't know how this was possible. I felt like I was floating. I was overcome with happiness. When your lips finally touched mine, I melted away. I can't even begin to describe the euphoria, the incredible peace I felt. And now you're gone again. And my heart is lonely again. I still feel your lips on mine, and I long to hold you. But you're drifting away from me. Like a ghost of a happy past. I can see you there, but you're so far away. Come back to me.

10-28-2003, 03:42 PM	#2 (permalink)
riptide4070 Addict Location: Boone, NC	beautiful but sad. It sucks when they go away but, "that's the way love goes." nice work __________________ "the greatest trick the devil ever pulled, was making the world believe he didn't exist" -Kevin Spacey 'The Usual Suspects'

10-28-2003, 03:53 PM	#3 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	WOWWWW...... Very touching me....... Thanks __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

10-28-2003, 04:44 PM	#4 (permalink)
Esen TFPer formaly known as Chauncey Location: North East	Very touching __________________ ~Esen What is everyone doing in my room?

10-31-2003, 10:20 PM	#7 (permalink)
ForgottenKnight Jesus Freak Location: Following the light...	Beautiful work! I'm impressed! Keep it up! __________________ "People say I'm strange, does that make me a stranger?"

10-30-2003, 08:41 AM	#5 (permalink)
Smoey Upright	I remeber that feeling and so I long for that...

10-31-2003, 06:43 PM	#6 (permalink)
lolita Upright	i think everyone feels that way at some stage...beautiful poem - good work!

11-04-2003, 05:51 PM	#8 (permalink)
Eowyn_Vala Insane Location: There's no place like home..	I remember my first kiss. And the best part is that I'm still with him and every kiss is just like the first one only better. It was the angel in the broom closet that did it. __________________ Cain: I know what you're doing. I've lead troops into battle before. DG: And, how am I doing? Cain: Well, there's less hugging when I do it

11-04-2003, 07:03 PM	#9 (permalink)
chavos Banned Location: St. Paul, MN	aw man...now i gotta go around missing my ex... an excellent poem with great images-i was there all the way.

11-04-2003, 08:04 PM	#10 (permalink)
losthellhound Thats MR. Muffin Face now Location: Everywhere work sends me	great stuff, really touched a part of my past that I usually dont go.. __________________ "Life is possible only with illusions. And so, the question for the science of mental health must become an absolutely new and revolutionary one, yet one that reflects the essence of the human condition: On what level of illusion does one live?" -- Ernest Becker, The Denial of Death

11-06-2003, 08:51 PM	#11 (permalink)
SSJwrestler Banned Location: Davidson, NC/ Manassas, VA	great job man