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*Nikki* 08-15-2003 07:12 PM

Let me be
 
Still sitting here and listening
To what was once my life
This song that once was ours
Like a twisting knife
Even to this day
Just hearing your voice
Tears open that hole in my heart
The one I thought I healed
I wish you would stop lingering
In my thoughts
In my mind
I wish you would take those six years
Erase them from time
I think of every second
You were a part of me
I wish that every second
I could now be set free
From the memories
That never seem to give up
Adding to my grief
I want to ask you why
I want to know what broke inside
Why you felt the need to lie
I want to take every ounce of pain
Inject it in your heart
A place you can't ever let go
Somewhere you can't hide
Your whole life you will sit and wonder
How it is that you could let me go
You had it all in front of you
Shame you didn't know
Now it is to late to reach over
And slide your hand into mine
Someone else is sitting here
Someone else is at my side
Leave me go and set me free
Don't come calling
Don't remind me
Don't bring back the past to kill my joy
So many years of pain I spent on you
Leave me alone
Let me be

sub zero 08-16-2003 11:36 PM

Reading through that I started to feel all sad, but then when I got to the end, I noticed that your sig rhymed with the last part of your poem. I'm sorry, but that made me LOL.

Your poem is really heart-felt though. Sounds like a true story or something. Is it a true story?

*Nikki* 08-17-2003 07:29 PM

Yes that is funny about my sig. I didn't notice it until you mentioned it.

100% True.

J.R.V.A. 08-17-2003 08:26 PM

Your writing always makes me feel. Thank you for sharing a part of you with me.

Esen 08-18-2003 05:43 PM

Yea, I really enjoyed that it was a real plea.
I dug it man-
It was just one of those pieces that wound up being very well balanced and moving.
Its a touch of your talents from inside.

rogue49 08-18-2003 07:28 PM

sorry for your pain & conflict.
I hope it will fade soon.

Mephex 04-06-2004 08:02 AM

Like a knife. I loved it, thank you :)

Seer666 04-09-2004 02:31 PM

Blood. ::looks at chest:: My blood....

In other words, "Ouch!". Very nicely done. Keep posting.

Memnoch 04-10-2004 10:33 PM

"I want to ask you why
I want to know what broke inside
Why you felt the need to lie"

I found this particular set of verse to be incredibly well balanced and rhymed. The rhythm flows *just right*. I love the imagery of "what broke inside".

MaGlC_MaN 04-29-2004 02:41 PM

that's really good


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