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Psivage · 08-09-2003, 06:39 PM

I'm writing a match for a e-fed I belong too. I want to know if this flows good, can visualize it and you get an idea of what is happening. This is a roughdraft, so there will be wrong punctuations.

EDIT: The match isn't over with. Just so you know I didn't end it like that.

Terryman vs. Big LDM

Big LDM is standing in the center of the ring. Terryman comes up to him to offer a handshake before the match. Big LDM looks at the hand, looks at Terryman then backhanded him across the face. Terryman staggered a few steps back. He shook his head, looks to the crowd and shrugs. He walked right back up to Big LDM, and once again offered his hand, once again Big LDM smack him. Terryman walk back once more. He looks down, shakes his head then looks at Big LDM for a third time Terryman offers his hand. Big LDM reeled back to backhand Terryman once more. Terryman drops down doing the splits and hits Big LDM square in the nutsack. Big LDM grabs his nut and bends over. While Terryman is still down he pokes Big LDM in the eyes.

Big LDM temporally blind swings wildly. Terryman grabs Big LDM arm, pulls him to the turnbuckle. Teryman climbs up and hit an arm breaker DDT. Big LDM is down. Taking full advantage, Terryman runs to the rope, bounce off and does a sliding drop-kick to Big LDM face. Terryman was pumped up, he was showing off for the fans at ringside. They were encouraging him on. Terryman climbs to the top turnbuckle he stands up. He is waiting. Big LDM slowly gets up, he looks to his right and left he doesn’t see Terryman. He turns around, see Terryman, Terryman leaps off, Big LDM steps forwards he catches Terryman in mid-flight. He turns it into a powerslam! He hooks the leg, Hugh goes for the count.

1…2…Kickout. Terryman kicks outs. Big LDM with a fist to the head, another one, and one more for the hell of it. Terryman is dazed by the powerslam and the blows to the head. Big LDM picks him up by the hair. Big LDM grab Terryman head. Big LDM with a running charge toward the turnbuckle. Terryman face goes smashing into the top turnbuckle. Big LDM point to a second turnbuckle on the opposite side, running charge, face smash. A third, running charge, face smash. Big LDM point to the opposite, the fourth turnbuckle. Big LDM starts with a running charge toward the fourth and final turnbuckle, Terryman with a back elbow gutshot, Big LDM lets go of Terryman head, Terryman grabs Big LDM head, he runs up the turnbuckle flips over and comes crashing down driving Big LDM head down on the mat face side up. Terryman quickly applies a dragon sleeper on Big LDM. Terryman pushes his knee into Big LDM neck as he leans back. Big LDM close to the ropes, he gets his leg underneath the bottom rope. Hugh makes Terryman release Big LDM.

J.R.V.A. · 08-13-2003, 04:06 AM

Sounds like you are there

Psivage · 08-13-2003, 04:21 PM

Thanks ( Unless that was a hip insult, I don't keep up with the young talk today.). I got it finished now. I had to changed the ending a bit. I still got what I want from it. Here is the whole match with commentary. Not too happy with the commentary.

Terryman vs. Big LDM

Lawrence Talbot: This match feature Big LDM and Terryman, both of these wrestler could make it big in the B.w.A.

Buzzy: Buzzy was big in the B.w.A

Lawrence Talbot: You sure were. Lets watch the action commence.

Big LDM is standing in the center of the ring. Terryman comes up to him to offer a handshake before the match. Big LDM looks at the hand, looks at Terryman then backhanded him across the face. Terryman staggered a few steps back. He shook his head, looks to the crowd and shrugs. He walked right back up to Big LDM, and once again offered his hand, once again Big LDM smacked him. Terryman walk back once more. He looks down, shakes his head then looks at Big LDM. For a third time Terryman offers his hand. Big LDM reeled back to backhand Terryman once more. Terryman drops down, doing the splits, and hits Big LDM square in the nutsack. Big LDM bends over grabbing his own nuts in pain. While Terryman is still down he pokes Big LDM in the eyes.

Lawrence: Oh! Wow, Terryman went for the double whammy there!

Buzzy: No whammy, no whammy, come on big money! Bzzzzzzzzzzz!

Lawrence Talbot: Wrong show Buzzy.

Big LDM temporally blind swings wildly. Terryman grabs Big LDM arm, pulls him to the turnbuckle. Teryman climbs up and hit an arm breaker DDT. Big LDM is down. Taking full advantage, Terryman runs to the rope, bounce off and does a sliding drop-kick to Big LDM face. Terryman was pumped up, he was showing off for the fans at ringside. They were encouraging him on. Terryman climbs to the top turnbuckle he stands up. He is waiting. Big LDM slowly gets up, he looks to his right and left he doesn’t see Terryman. He turns around, see Terryman, Terryman leaps off, Big LDM steps forwards he catches Terryman in mid-flight. He turns it into a powerslam! He hooks the leg, Hugh goes for the count.

Lawrence Talbot: What a power move from Big LDM.

Buzzy: Terryman went boom.

1…2…Kickout. Terryman kicks outs. Big LDM with a fist to the head, another one, and one more for the hell of it. Terryman is dazed by the powerslam and the blows to the head. Big LDM picks him up by the hair. Big LDM grab Terryman head. Big LDM with a running charge toward the turnbuckle. Terryman face goes smashing into the top turnbuckle. Big LDM points to a second turnbuckle on the opposite side, running charge, face smash. A third, running charge, face smash. Big LDM points to the opposite, the fourth turnbuckle. Big LDM starts with a running charge toward the fourth and final turnbuckle, Terryman with a back elbow gutshot, Big LDM lets go of Terryman head, Terryman grabs Big LDM head, he runs up the turnbuckle flips over and comes crashing down driving Big LDM head down on the mat, face side up. Terryman quickly applies a dragon sleeper on Big LDM. Terryman pushes his knee into Big LDM neck as he leans back. Big LDM close to the ropes, he gets his leg underneath the bottom rope. Hugh makes Terryman release Big LDM. Terryman starts clapping his hands, motioning to the crowd to cheer him on. Big LDM starts to stagger up. Terryman bounces off the rope and delivers an Ax-kick to Big LDM. Big LDM goes down to the mat once again. Terryman for the pin. 1…2… Kickout!

Lawrence Talbot: Two close calls so far here in the match.

Buzzy: Terryman is Buzzrrific!
Lawrence Talbot: Buzzrrific? Is that complement or a insult?

Buzzy: It’s Buzzrrific!

Terryman with some punches to the head. Terryman gets up and he is, motioning for Big LDM to stand up. Big LDM stagger to the standing position. Terryman runs at Big LDM slides between his legs and out of the ring, grabs Big LDM feet and pulls them out from under him. Big LDM hits the mat hard once again. Terryman runs around the front row slapping hands with the fans. Terry man climbs back in the ring. Terryman turns to the crowd and pump his fist in the air. Big LDM is up. Big LDM charges at Terryman, Terryman turns around. Spear! Big LDM spears Terryman half way out of the ring. Terryman legs are caught up in the ropes, he is hanging upside down outside of the ring. Big LDM slides outside and starts laying in with stomps to Terryman mid-section. Hugh yells at Big LDM to step back, Big LDM ignores Hugh, and continues to stomp on Terryman. Hugh threatens Big LDM with a DQ if he doesn’t step back. Reluctantly Big LDM steps back. Hugh undoes Terryman legs from the ropes, Terryman falls to the floor. Big LDM steps forward and grabs Terryman. Big LDM puts Terryman into a bear hug, Terryman tries to struggle but can’t overcome Big LDM strength. Hugh begins to count 1…2…3…4…5…6… Big LDM releases Terryman from the bear hug. Big LDM throws Terryman into the ring and climbs to the top of the turnbuckle.

Lawrence Talbot: Big LDM looking pretty dangerous perch ontop of the turnbuckle.

Buzzy: Big LDM looking pretty? Why don’t you ever say Buzzy look pretty? You no like Buzzy?

Lawrence Talbot: I said he is looking pretty dangerous. Dangerous. Key word dangerous.

Buzzy: Oh Sorry.

Lawrence Talbot: That’s all right.

Buzzy: So you not think Buzzy is pretty and dangerous?

Big LDM with a spinning leg drop from the top turnbuckle. Big LDM lands it across Terryman chest. Big LDM with a pin. 1…2…2 ½.. Big LDM lifts up Terryman stopping the pin. Big LDM throws Terryman into the turnbuckle, Big LDM follows up with a clothesline, Big LDM hits a DDT on Terryman after the clothesline. Big LDM picks up Terryman once more, Big LDM move Terryman into position. Big LDM with the Snake Eyes, Terryman is out of it. Big LDM picks up Terryman, they are in the center of the ring. Big LDM picks up Terryman and hit the Fall from Grace.

Lawrence Talbot: It is over with! Hide the dead hooker this the end!

Buzzy: Hide what?

Lawrence Talbot: Umm, nothing.

Buzzy: Bzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!

He goes for the pin. 1…2… The crowd erupts with cheers Joe Da Killa King appears on the entrance. Big LDM see this and stand up breaking the 3 count. Big LDM looks at the fallen Terryman, looks at Joe. Big LDM starts cursing at Joe, daring him to step into the ring. Joe just look at Big LDM not moving and inch. Terryman begins to stir. Big LDM is still jawing with Joe. Hugh is telling Joe to leave ringside. Joe starts up back the ramp all the while never taking his eyes of Big LDM. Terryman is up. Terry man back up to the ropes. Big LDM turns around, Terryman bounces off the ropes, Terryman jumps up and lands on Big LDM shoulders. Terryman with the hurricanrana
DDT!. Big LDM is down. Terryman slaps on the Terrymanslaughter! Terryman clamps down as hard as he can. Big LDM is in pain. He can’t reach the ropes, Hugh is asking Big LDM if he wants to quit he shakes he head no. Terryman digs in with the Terrymanslaughter, Big LDM screams in pain. He won’t quit. Terryman release the hold, temporality relief Big LDM tries to move away. Terryman isn’t done yet. Terryman goes for the Legslaughter! He is twisting as hard as he can. Big LDM is in severe pain. Hugh goes down and checks. YES!! Big LDM submits! Hugh signals for the bell to ring. Terryman wins by submission.

Lawrence Talbot: What a comeback by Terryman, just when you thought it was over, Terryman showed some fortitude.

Buzzy: Buzzy was right! Terryman is Buzzrrific!

Big LDM roll out of the ring. Big LDM spots Joe still standing on the ramp. Big LDM charges at Joe, blaming him for the lost. Joe charges at Big LDM.They collide in fists of fury, both striking the other one. back up the ramp they battle. Joe steps back and does a front drop-kick, Big LDM blocks it. Big LDM with a boot to head of Joe. Joe is stunned. Big LDM picks up Joe and set him up for a fall away slam. He does it! Joe’s body hit the metal stage hard a CLANG! rang out through the arena. Big LDM pick up Joe and performs a DDT. Joe hit hard, his body going limp with the punishment. Big LDM grabs Joe and move to the edge of the entrance. He shove Joe’s head between his leg.

Lawrence Talbot: He can’t be serious! He could end Joe’s career before it even begins!

Buzzy: Buzzy can’t look!

"Welcome to B.w.A Bitch!" Big LDM screams as he lift Joe up for a powerbomb. Big LDM nails it. Joe goes over the edge and down on the concrete below. Joe body slam hard into the concrete. Joe is convoluting in pain.Big LDM raise his fist in the air as the crowd assaults him with boos. Big LDM turns and leave the stage.

J.R.V.A. · 08-13-2003, 09:08 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Psivage
Thanks ( Unless that was a hip insult, I don't keep up with the young talk today.). I got it finished now. I had to changed the ending a bit. I still got what I want from it. Here is the whole match with commentary. Not too happy with the commentary.

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Nope, no insult intended lol

I'm not up with the hip talk myself, in fact,I'm probably older than you. I just meant the way you wrote that,made me feel like I was there. Thanks

Psivage · 08-14-2003, 07:19 AM

thanks.

08-09-2003, 06:39 PM	#1 (permalink)
Psivage Psycho	For wrestling fans. I'm writing a match for a e-fed I belong too. I want to know if this flows good, can visualize it and you get an idea of what is happening. This is a roughdraft, so there will be wrong punctuations. EDIT: The match isn't over with. Just so you know I didn't end it like that. Terryman vs. Big LDM Big LDM is standing in the center of the ring. Terryman comes up to him to offer a handshake before the match. Big LDM looks at the hand, looks at Terryman then backhanded him across the face. Terryman staggered a few steps back. He shook his head, looks to the crowd and shrugs. He walked right back up to Big LDM, and once again offered his hand, once again Big LDM smack him. Terryman walk back once more. He looks down, shakes his head then looks at Big LDM for a third time Terryman offers his hand. Big LDM reeled back to backhand Terryman once more. Terryman drops down doing the splits and hits Big LDM square in the nutsack. Big LDM grabs his nut and bends over. While Terryman is still down he pokes Big LDM in the eyes. Big LDM temporally blind swings wildly. Terryman grabs Big LDM arm, pulls him to the turnbuckle. Teryman climbs up and hit an arm breaker DDT. Big LDM is down. Taking full advantage, Terryman runs to the rope, bounce off and does a sliding drop-kick to Big LDM face. Terryman was pumped up, he was showing off for the fans at ringside. They were encouraging him on. Terryman climbs to the top turnbuckle he stands up. He is waiting. Big LDM slowly gets up, he looks to his right and left he doesn’t see Terryman. He turns around, see Terryman, Terryman leaps off, Big LDM steps forwards he catches Terryman in mid-flight. He turns it into a powerslam! He hooks the leg, Hugh goes for the count. 1…2…Kickout. Terryman kicks outs. Big LDM with a fist to the head, another one, and one more for the hell of it. Terryman is dazed by the powerslam and the blows to the head. Big LDM picks him up by the hair. Big LDM grab Terryman head. Big LDM with a running charge toward the turnbuckle. Terryman face goes smashing into the top turnbuckle. Big LDM point to a second turnbuckle on the opposite side, running charge, face smash. A third, running charge, face smash. Big LDM point to the opposite, the fourth turnbuckle. Big LDM starts with a running charge toward the fourth and final turnbuckle, Terryman with a back elbow gutshot, Big LDM lets go of Terryman head, Terryman grabs Big LDM head, he runs up the turnbuckle flips over and comes crashing down driving Big LDM head down on the mat face side up. Terryman quickly applies a dragon sleeper on Big LDM. Terryman pushes his knee into Big LDM neck as he leans back. Big LDM close to the ropes, he gets his leg underneath the bottom rope. Hugh makes Terryman release Big LDM.

08-13-2003, 04:06 AM	#2 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	Sounds like you are there __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

08-13-2003, 04:21 PM	#3 (permalink)
Psivage Psycho	Thanks ( Unless that was a hip insult, I don't keep up with the young talk today.). I got it finished now. I had to changed the ending a bit. I still got what I want from it. Here is the whole match with commentary. Not too happy with the commentary. Terryman vs. Big LDM Lawrence Talbot: This match feature Big LDM and Terryman, both of these wrestler could make it big in the B.w.A. Buzzy: Buzzy was big in the B.w.A Lawrence Talbot: You sure were. Lets watch the action commence. Big LDM is standing in the center of the ring. Terryman comes up to him to offer a handshake before the match. Big LDM looks at the hand, looks at Terryman then backhanded him across the face. Terryman staggered a few steps back. He shook his head, looks to the crowd and shrugs. He walked right back up to Big LDM, and once again offered his hand, once again Big LDM smacked him. Terryman walk back once more. He looks down, shakes his head then looks at Big LDM. For a third time Terryman offers his hand. Big LDM reeled back to backhand Terryman once more. Terryman drops down, doing the splits, and hits Big LDM square in the nutsack. Big LDM bends over grabbing his own nuts in pain. While Terryman is still down he pokes Big LDM in the eyes. Lawrence: Oh! Wow, Terryman went for the double whammy there! Buzzy: No whammy, no whammy, come on big money! Bzzzzzzzzzzz! Lawrence Talbot: Wrong show Buzzy. Big LDM temporally blind swings wildly. Terryman grabs Big LDM arm, pulls him to the turnbuckle. Teryman climbs up and hit an arm breaker DDT. Big LDM is down. Taking full advantage, Terryman runs to the rope, bounce off and does a sliding drop-kick to Big LDM face. Terryman was pumped up, he was showing off for the fans at ringside. They were encouraging him on. Terryman climbs to the top turnbuckle he stands up. He is waiting. Big LDM slowly gets up, he looks to his right and left he doesn’t see Terryman. He turns around, see Terryman, Terryman leaps off, Big LDM steps forwards he catches Terryman in mid-flight. He turns it into a powerslam! He hooks the leg, Hugh goes for the count. Lawrence Talbot: What a power move from Big LDM. Buzzy: Terryman went boom. 1…2…Kickout. Terryman kicks outs. Big LDM with a fist to the head, another one, and one more for the hell of it. Terryman is dazed by the powerslam and the blows to the head. Big LDM picks him up by the hair. Big LDM grab Terryman head. Big LDM with a running charge toward the turnbuckle. Terryman face goes smashing into the top turnbuckle. Big LDM points to a second turnbuckle on the opposite side, running charge, face smash. A third, running charge, face smash. Big LDM points to the opposite, the fourth turnbuckle. Big LDM starts with a running charge toward the fourth and final turnbuckle, Terryman with a back elbow gutshot, Big LDM lets go of Terryman head, Terryman grabs Big LDM head, he runs up the turnbuckle flips over and comes crashing down driving Big LDM head down on the mat, face side up. Terryman quickly applies a dragon sleeper on Big LDM. Terryman pushes his knee into Big LDM neck as he leans back. Big LDM close to the ropes, he gets his leg underneath the bottom rope. Hugh makes Terryman release Big LDM. Terryman starts clapping his hands, motioning to the crowd to cheer him on. Big LDM starts to stagger up. Terryman bounces off the rope and delivers an Ax-kick to Big LDM. Big LDM goes down to the mat once again. Terryman for the pin. 1…2… Kickout! Lawrence Talbot: Two close calls so far here in the match. Buzzy: Terryman is Buzzrrific! Lawrence Talbot: Buzzrrific? Is that complement or a insult? Buzzy: It’s Buzzrrific! Terryman with some punches to the head. Terryman gets up and he is, motioning for Big LDM to stand up. Big LDM stagger to the standing position. Terryman runs at Big LDM slides between his legs and out of the ring, grabs Big LDM feet and pulls them out from under him. Big LDM hits the mat hard once again. Terryman runs around the front row slapping hands with the fans. Terry man climbs back in the ring. Terryman turns to the crowd and pump his fist in the air. Big LDM is up. Big LDM charges at Terryman, Terryman turns around. Spear! Big LDM spears Terryman half way out of the ring. Terryman legs are caught up in the ropes, he is hanging upside down outside of the ring. Big LDM slides outside and starts laying in with stomps to Terryman mid-section. Hugh yells at Big LDM to step back, Big LDM ignores Hugh, and continues to stomp on Terryman. Hugh threatens Big LDM with a DQ if he doesn’t step back. Reluctantly Big LDM steps back. Hugh undoes Terryman legs from the ropes, Terryman falls to the floor. Big LDM steps forward and grabs Terryman. Big LDM puts Terryman into a bear hug, Terryman tries to struggle but can’t overcome Big LDM strength. Hugh begins to count 1…2…3…4…5…6… Big LDM releases Terryman from the bear hug. Big LDM throws Terryman into the ring and climbs to the top of the turnbuckle. Lawrence Talbot: Big LDM looking pretty dangerous perch ontop of the turnbuckle. Buzzy: Big LDM looking pretty? Why don’t you ever say Buzzy look pretty? You no like Buzzy? Lawrence Talbot: I said he is looking pretty dangerous. Dangerous. Key word dangerous. Buzzy: Oh Sorry. Lawrence Talbot: That’s all right. Buzzy: So you not think Buzzy is pretty and dangerous? Big LDM with a spinning leg drop from the top turnbuckle. Big LDM lands it across Terryman chest. Big LDM with a pin. 1…2…2 ½.. Big LDM lifts up Terryman stopping the pin. Big LDM throws Terryman into the turnbuckle, Big LDM follows up with a clothesline, Big LDM hits a DDT on Terryman after the clothesline. Big LDM picks up Terryman once more, Big LDM move Terryman into position. Big LDM with the Snake Eyes, Terryman is out of it. Big LDM picks up Terryman, they are in the center of the ring. Big LDM picks up Terryman and hit the Fall from Grace. Lawrence Talbot: It is over with! Hide the dead hooker this the end! Buzzy: Hide what? Lawrence Talbot: Umm, nothing. Buzzy: Bzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz! He goes for the pin. 1…2… The crowd erupts with cheers Joe Da Killa King appears on the entrance. Big LDM see this and stand up breaking the 3 count. Big LDM looks at the fallen Terryman, looks at Joe. Big LDM starts cursing at Joe, daring him to step into the ring. Joe just look at Big LDM not moving and inch. Terryman begins to stir. Big LDM is still jawing with Joe. Hugh is telling Joe to leave ringside. Joe starts up back the ramp all the while never taking his eyes of Big LDM. Terryman is up. Terry man back up to the ropes. Big LDM turns around, Terryman bounces off the ropes, Terryman jumps up and lands on Big LDM shoulders. Terryman with the hurricanrana DDT!. Big LDM is down. Terryman slaps on the Terrymanslaughter! Terryman clamps down as hard as he can. Big LDM is in pain. He can’t reach the ropes, Hugh is asking Big LDM if he wants to quit he shakes he head no. Terryman digs in with the Terrymanslaughter, Big LDM screams in pain. He won’t quit. Terryman release the hold, temporality relief Big LDM tries to move away. Terryman isn’t done yet. Terryman goes for the Legslaughter! He is twisting as hard as he can. Big LDM is in severe pain. Hugh goes down and checks. YES!! Big LDM submits! Hugh signals for the bell to ring. Terryman wins by submission. Lawrence Talbot: What a comeback by Terryman, just when you thought it was over, Terryman showed some fortitude. Buzzy: Buzzy was right! Terryman is Buzzrrific! Big LDM roll out of the ring. Big LDM spots Joe still standing on the ramp. Big LDM charges at Joe, blaming him for the lost. Joe charges at Big LDM.They collide in fists of fury, both striking the other one. back up the ramp they battle. Joe steps back and does a front drop-kick, Big LDM blocks it. Big LDM with a boot to head of Joe. Joe is stunned. Big LDM picks up Joe and set him up for a fall away slam. He does it! Joe’s body hit the metal stage hard a CLANG! rang out through the arena. Big LDM pick up Joe and performs a DDT. Joe hit hard, his body going limp with the punishment. Big LDM grabs Joe and move to the edge of the entrance. He shove Joe’s head between his leg. Lawrence Talbot: He can’t be serious! He could end Joe’s career before it even begins! Buzzy: Buzzy can’t look! "Welcome to B.w.A Bitch!" Big LDM screams as he lift Joe up for a powerbomb. Big LDM nails it. Joe goes over the edge and down on the concrete below. Joe body slam hard into the concrete. Joe is convoluting in pain.Big LDM raise his fist in the air as the crowd assaults him with boos. Big LDM turns and leave the stage.

08-14-2003, 07:19 AM	#5 (permalink)
Psivage Psycho	thanks.